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The Ferryman's Lament
By patterjack
21 August 2006
A rough ballad -- meant only for fun. I rarely use the form and so it may not scan all that well .

Said Charon to the gathering shades that waited on the bank:

No point in hanging back there , no point in pulling rank .

You can either come along with me , or else ( if you're too poor )

You can wander for a hundred years on Acheron River's shore .

Hold back that last lot , Hermes , [ though none of them seems keen,]

I can tell you that this latest crowd is the biggest I have seen.

I wonder what happens up above to bring them here below?

But I tell you , there's too many now for my old frame to row!

Praise Zeus , that I've been able to save some ready cash ,

(I banked it on the other side , it was a large-ish stash ).

Then I persuaded Hephaestus to modernise his shop

And build for me a motor , with a triple bladed prop.

I can get the clients to the other side at about ten times the speed

And leave these scrawny arms of mine comparatively freed .

But as usual with new progress , I've found that there's a catch --

The price at a single obol apiece is not enough to match

The rising costs of maintenance , and especially gasoline

And I spent the lot of that account on which I used to lean .

So I 'm caught between old Hades , and this lot waiting here--

Their numbers keep on growing --- and alas it is my fear

That if earth's nations don't make peace -- instead of making war--

They'll keep on coming down to us in waves of more and more .

I'll keep on filling my old boat , though the prospect's looking grim --

They could all stay here at Acheron ? or maybe they might swim ?

But no matter what will happen , I'll be in a proper fix.

I might need to franchise boatmen on the Lethe or the Styx.

Reviews
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Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 20th August 2006
nice poem. 
 
-rilLie 
 
0_o
Suggestion
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 21st August 2006
'The rising cost of maintenence- especially gasoline' 
 
Give the missus a pair of paddles and she can row the thing for you. It's about time she started pulling her weight around the place, instead of sat watching soap operas and gossiping about 'her over the road'.. 
 
Well done, though a few more anti-feministic innuendos/observations would have added a nice touch. 
 
Rgds. 
 
Givitsum
Oh no !
Written by patterjack (1179 comments posted) 21st August 2006
I don't think I need to explain at great length  
That to take on the feminists I lack moral strength. 
 
My spine is all yellow , my belly lacks fire --  
A long peaceful life is to what I aspire  
 
patterjack 
 
 
Clever, funny & thought provoking
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 21st August 2006
Nice piece patterjack! It may not win any prizes - but I liked it a lot - there is a place for humour in poetry - you clearly have a finely tuned, dry sense of the absurd! 
 
Oli
good mix
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 21st August 2006
I do find poetry more accessible when the poet is kicking around the foothills of Parnassus rather than sitting atop the giddy heights. The introduction of humour and the mixing of myth and the absurd is just what a poem needs to keep it grounded and accessible to philistines like me. A poet with a sense of the absurd, just what the site needs. 
Cheers 
Jane 

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