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take it
By no1butClo
22 August 2006
"...it's my life..."

Take your life into your hands
feel the bumps and bruises, the
contours and wrinkles, take it,
smooth it over, make it unique.

Take your life into your hands,
feel the shape and weight of it,
the top to toe of it, ask a
merchant man to guess the price.

Take your life into your hands,
lob it against the wall a bit, throw
it a punch and brawl with it, take it,
and see how long before it dies.

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Inscrutable You
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 24th August 2006
A few typos "smooth", "your" not "Youre", "punch and brawl" - but i s'pose you spotted them yourself.  
 
You seem to be very introspective, which is no bad thing for a poet. I detect a sadness though, has your little heart been broken recently? Shame on the perpetrator! 
 
Oli

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