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By no1butClo

22 August 2006

Got a feeling i've COMPLETELY missed the mark with this one, help help help!

"I can actually feel your heartbeat"

Hot
Skin
Strip
Bare
Sweat
Bite
Shiver
Kiss

Something
Different
In the
Air
Makes me
Want to
Breathe like
this

Scratch
Tickle
Brush
Stroke
Send me
To
Another
World

Lie be-
side me
I will
Stoke
These fires
As
Our night
Unfolds

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Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 24th August 2006

Really great. I read ALOT of poetry and i've no idea what is good or bad simply what i like, and don't. I like poetry that makes me think, makes me feel, has something a bit different to offer.
I loved this and the way you used the senses. A different kind of love poem. Very sensual and descriptive with a great rhythm. The title is perfect. Well done

Excellent!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 24th August 2006

C'mon baby stoke my fire!

Oli

Wow
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 24th August 2006

I really like this, gives me tingles. Got a funny feeling about the last verse tho...like it doesn't fit somehow....but that is probably just my weirdness! great

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 24th August 2006

p.s- i have just come on to read this for the third time. It is SO good! Missed the mark? You hit the nail on the head!

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