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You are not the same as me
By Ostara
04 May 2005

I wrote this on demand for a poetry workshop - I couldn't find a repetitive poem to match my theme!

The poem went on to be performed by some of my students in a school assembly on bullying and mentoring; it sounds great when spoken aloud with different inflections and tones. It would be nice to hear what adults make of it though.


You are not the same as me

You judge people by their appearance

You are not the same as me

You pretend to listen when you don't

You are not the same as me

You make promises you never keep

You are not the same as me

You think you are better than the rest

You are not the same as me

You are embarrassed by disability

You are not the same as me

You expect special treatment

You are not the same as me

You do not seem to fear being alone

You are not the same as me

I see you every day in the street

You are not the same as me

I see the differences between us

You are not the same as me

I see the similarities between us

You are not the same as me

I have a connection with you anyway

You are just the same as me

Only different

 

Reviews
Spot on
Written by Bagheera (680 comments posted) 4th May 2005
As far as I can see this is perfectly suited for the age-grop it is aimed at, ie. school age children. 
The repetitive nature of the alternate lines reinforces (IMHO) the essential message and I think it's jsut right for a school assembly presentation. 
The message is equally valid and important for us all, adults as well as children - pity there are a lot of adults who don't [won't, can't be bothered to ...] listen :sigh
liked it very much
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 4th May 2005
Could see it being performed exactly as you described -and it's very topical -especially with those ads and campaigns featuring premier league players re racism and the train staff raising awareness about harassment and intimidation 
Just one query -is this a syntax error? 
You are the just same as me 
should that read 
You are just the same as me? 
oops...
Written by Ostara (61 comments posted) 4th May 2005
haha, yes it's a mistake! I have read that over and over and never spotted it - I will change it now.
your not the same as me
Written by sheppard (36 comments posted) 23rd May 2005
Excellent, I have read this several times, and each time different thoughts come into my head, it says so much, and I can relate to so many people. :grin  
Thanks for sharing this.
thank you
Written by Ostara (61 comments posted) 23rd May 2005
that is a very high compliment indeed :grin
You are not the same as me
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 7th May 2006
A work that everyone can understand - very thought provoking. We do not always need the largest words - the best work is the work that we can all understand and gain something from or work that makes us smile or think- this is one of those works - Well done Ostara. ;)
You are not the same as me
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 7th May 2006
Just one thing Ostara - I wondered if there would be even greater impact if the third from last line read:- 
 
Yet we have a connection 
 
(Just a thought - what do I know in the presence of genious)

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