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Running With the Moon (Informal Theme)
By rilLie
24 August 2006
it's almost like "Running With the Moon", my first post, but this one was written for an informal theme taht was supposed to be an essay. i based it on that composition, by that time hidden away in the dark marshes of the back of my science notebook, and this was the result. i did this last june and i got it back from my teacher yesterday and she said it was great, only that my penmanship sucks... haha.. by the way.. this got an Outstanding!!! My first in how many years... anyway, enjoy!

The moon as a mythical figure had always captured my attention. So did lycanthropes, wolves, Latin, forests and Roman gods and goddesses. It was no surprise when I dreamed about them one night.

The dream was unusually high-quality-colored. The night sky was a solemn veil amongst thousands of bright stars. And the moon? It was cold, silent, and bright.

In the dream, I was a wolf amongst the pack. I was the alpha. A sign over to the east read: "Edinburgh -- 5 miles". The wolf couldn't comprehend what it was, although my human mind could.

As a human, you would've felt awkward and scared standing alone in the forest. The forest was just a bunch of trees with a lot of scary animals. But to the wolf, it was more than that. It was home. I could feel the wolf's power and agility, senses beyond the lonely human's imagination.

I looked up. For a moment, it was just the moon.

We began to run.

Savage joy filled the wolves' heart, running with the moon, our paws rustling the fallen leaves atop the grass as we went.

All that matters now was to fulfill his longing to run with the moon, breath-takingly cold and bright, to howl with savage joy.

Then, all of a sudden, I changed perspective. I was now looking from an aerial view. I could see the alpha leading the group.

They stopped by a cliff, the alpha leading them all the way.

The wolves looked like something out of a painting, or of another dream, now, standing up, heads upraised, listening to sounds human ears couldn't.

The wolves howled. It wasn't deep, or gluttoral; it was a social howl.

Eventually, the howl rose and fell with a long slide at the end. There was primeval beauty to it, a longing that resonated in the wolves' souls.

The look in the wolves' eyes was hungry, primal, as it always was when it feels the moon rising, waiting, calling for it...

"When the moon calls, her children must answer." a voice in my head said.

Then, I woke up.

Reviews

Written by JofAllTrades (11 comments posted) 24th August 2006
Anything that ends "Then I woke up" must be approached with some caution. 
 
I must say i wasn't too keen on this offering, but thats not to discredit it, its merely an opinion, I am sure other people will respond differently. 
 
You clearly have ability, but you should read it over again and see if the sentences scan in the way they should, some of the grammar is rather awkward; "So it was no surprise when i dreamed about them one night".  
 
Was this an actual dream you had? If so then my first comment was unfair, and id also be jealous, my dreams are much more disjointed.
thanks.
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 24th August 2006
thanks, Jof. I'll try to remember that. I'm trying to edit it now. it's pretty anoying because i have to use p's and br's. anyway. thanks!
Kinda Nonfiction
Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 24th August 2006
I think it would more suit the non-fiction genre than here. It felt more like something out of a personal diary and less of a story types. Very randomply thrown statements. You do have lot of scope with this piece though. It somehow lacks a little flow so to speak. I have no clue as to why the protagonist dreamt specifically about being a wolf and apart from the intial few lines, the moon doesn't really feature prominently, because i started reading this piece thinking it's got something to do with moon per say at least symbolically. But again, personal opinion, others might love it. 
 
Regards, 
TT
Why Green?
Written by nascent (106 comments posted) 24th August 2006
Hi rilLie 
I'm having real difficulty reading it, not because of the writing - I haven't even got that far - but because it's green and makes my eyes go funny!  
 
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I will tell u why
Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 24th August 2006
I had the same problem....but the moment i signed in and checked the link again, it was alright..as if by magic..coz i was all ready to blast him as well for the color...try logging in again...may be it will work. 
 
Chow, 
TT
twistedtales
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 24th August 2006
i tried logging in again.. it won't work... the magic won't come to me!!! argh.. now i have to deal with the horrors of html. I'm not one to say that. I study it every saturday in my school.. anyway.. thanks for the tip. i'll try again tomorrow.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 24th August 2006
It put me in mind of a Childrens book called Wolf Brother where part of the book was written from the wolfs perspective. I thougth your piece was very atmospheric and with a dream like quality but like JOAT I winced when I read the last line bit too cliched for me. 
But a good effort at capturing a dream 
cheers 
BBS

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