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Poetry
First Trackday
By clockwork
24 August 2006
This is a first draft - please pull it apart !!

Too nervous to sleep a moment longer, I crawl out of my warm cocoon
Stroll around the paddock and tremble as I peer through the gloom –
Everything is wet, the persistent rain brings a sense of impending doom.
 

I get a coffee, nibble some food, head down to the clubhouse to sign
Briefing helps to calm the nerves - the rain has slowed, may turn fine
Smell of fuel as tanks are filled, wriggle into leathers – help, its time.
 

The low rumble of Ducati engines rising to a roar as carefully we flow
Onto the track for the first time - wet and slippery so take it slow
Once, twice around, there’s the flag just as excitement starts to grow
 

Back to the paddock to wait – the rain has gone, the track is nearly dry
Almost settled when “Novices to the holding area” comes the tannoy cry
And I find myself wondering if there is any chance I can learn to fly.
 

Quicker than before but still not fast – the corners seem so tight
Down the straight and up the hill, then the track drops out of sight
Make a complete mess of the Gooseneck - will I ever get this right?
 

Another lap and getting faster it’s clear
Oh, the bike in front has missed a gear
Over The Mountain – can I take him here?
No! Over the wet grass I have to steer.
 

It’s time to find an instructor and ask him to show me the way
He said he would come and find me during the course of play
A yellow flag – there he was pushing – his fuel drained away!
 

Session four and there is Tony having filled his fuel store
Away we go – this is faster than I have ever been before
The lines come into focus, my heart pounds, Yes! More!
 

Each lap now it’s earlier on the gas and later on the brakes
It feels normal when the wheel lifts and the front shakes
I’d say just about any other adrenaline rushes are fakes
 

Turning in later and harder I felt my boot scrape the ground
Kept it out of the way, but it was the peg next time around!
It seems that every corner has a new joy to be found.
 

Its time to call it a day – I’m tired and pushing far too hard
Return to the paddock, end of a wonderful day, and park
Every muscle aches with exhaustion even while I laugh.

Reviews

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 24th August 2006
Really good! Honestly reading this my heart started racing and i was reading faster and faster. I'm sure the effect you wanted to achieve. 
I thought the language and imagery was great however the ONLY constructive thing i can think to say is that to me, the beat of the poem was a little off sometimes. Particularly in the third line of your three line stanzas. It needs an extra couple beats or another line before you hit the rhyme again i think? I'm not sure but i felt a little interrupted sometimes, if that is a good way to put it?  
I don't know much about poetry so feel free to ignore me! 
However, otherwise, great!

Written by clockwork (17 comments posted) 24th August 2006
The rythym being slightly off is what I am not entirely happy with so thanks for that - some more work in order then.  
 
Thank you for your other comments - it is the first time I have tried to write on a specific subject "to order".

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