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Good.
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
Witty piece Talisker. Though I doubt it will have the combatants shaking in their boots. Mind if it makes you feel better, I suppose that's all that matters. Personally I'll stick with Cromwell. At least the executions ran on time, if you'll excuse the anachronism.
Well done. Liked the traditional layout.
Slan! |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
Enjoyed this, although it seems God, or at least those who porport to follow him/she/it have a lot to answer for.
Liked the use of playground rhyme, seems to fit the nature of the protagonists.
Phil. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
| Found this interesting and beautifully simple. It inspired me to post my own musings on the subject, so cheers! |
Thanks Folks...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
Phil
I share your reservations about evoking the God fellow, as a confirmed atheist myself. I think that it is a cliche now though, when in extremis we feel the need to cry our to someone, or something. God is a nice, easy, three letter word to remember.
Apologies if i offend anyone's religious sensitivities. I would die for anyone's right to practice whatever faith they like - it just happens that I don't buy it (in spite of a Catholic upbringing).
I consider myself quite spiritual.
Oli |
A plea...
Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
...that is simple but still inspirational. Voicing the thoughts of many. It also had a slight sinister feeling to it. Like the beating of a drum, or a ball against a wall in this case.
'God' doesn't have to be a person. I'm sure to many the IDEA of such an energy brings comfort. It is the easiest word to use. It can be interpreted by each reader accordingly. Works well.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
I'd go a bit further than Gill and say it was very sinsister in feeling, not sure why exactly but that is the nature of a feeling,it's emotion not thought. Perhaps it was the juxtapostion of the innocent rhyme with murderous religous hatred.
I too was a bit uneasy about the use of God; isnt he the cause of it all after all?
Anyway it made me think and gave me the opportunity to use 'juxtaposition' for which I'm grateful
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:)
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
cute poem, but still true... i liked it very much.
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Perhaps...
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 25th August 2006 |
... when one thinks of it , the word should not have been God but Gods-- and I am not referring to the Graeco- Roman set that I myself mention so often. You know where you stand with that lot at least .
How many ways to heaven are there I wonder ? Nowadays the quickest physical one seems to be via bomb -- especially if you want to sacrifice yourself while taking a lot of innocents with you . Heaven's Angels and/or Houris must be working overtime to entertain the influx of martyrs or warriors .
A plague on all their houses ( it will probably finish up with anthrax bombs anyway )
patterjack
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powerful
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 26th August 2006 |
i agree absolutely with evrything said, gill21 hit the nail on the head for me, within the context of a playground rhyme this finds added power.
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Thanks all for kind comments...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 26th August 2006 |
Its one of those pieces that you write one day, then read with cringing embarassment the next. It was probably arrogant and futile of me to try and approach such a subject in this way. What is done is done though - the genie is out of the bottle, for better or worse.
Oli. |
Chilling...
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 26th August 2006 |
I agree with BBS, it is has a very sinister inner energy to it. I am sure it is because of the child games connection. Something about the intonation of the words made the heckles raise on my neck, it is very eeiry, and atmospheric.
A good poem always provokes a feeling and invokes a sense of something either or good or bad...Your poem is excellent and certainly provoked a reaction in me...
Well done, keep it up!
best wishes
mish x |
Written by kevg (45 comments posted) 26th August 2006 |
I follow the sentiments of the others; perhaps the 'nursery rhyme' style distances us as readers from the true evil of the situation?? I guess it could also serve to represent the innocence of those who pay the price ultimate of war - the civilians.
Either way - the poem is thought provoking, and it looks like you managed to start a discussion.
As for the 'God' debate, I'm uneasy with it being given a capital letter in any capacity. But until the Christians think of a more original name for that particular god I guess it will have to do.
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Written by kevg (45 comments posted) 26th August 2006 |
I forgot to say...great piece of poetry!
KevG |
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