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The Storm can Wash the Plates |
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By arrowsmith10
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25 August 2006 |
this poem was inspired by the last line of an edwin morgan's poem which particularly tickled me.... although his poem was about strawberries....i think "The Storm can Wash the Plates" (Edwin Morgan)
Big fat drops of rain
Splash into the pan,
The sausages sizzle
Gurgle and glisten
Big and juicy
They might pop
Swelling like the black clouds
Hanging low and imposing.
The fat spits up to meet the falling rain
A cloud of white steam rises
Rises like a white army going to fight the black clouds above
Foiled
The army fails,
Evaporates into the damp air.
Grab an umbrella!
No use, too late
Take cover in the tent
Pattering on the roof
The beans?
The beans!
The beans are outside
Drowning in a pool of raindrops
Leave them.
The storm can wash the plates.
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Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 25th August 2006 | as a literal interpretation yes, it was about eating strawberries hehe. However i certainly draw more from it. It's one of my favourite poems actually.
Yours led on well i thought! It carried the poem through but you did it with your own style. I like how you didn't copy the rhythm etc as is often tempting to do you still made it your own.
It had a very different feel to it also. To me, his was about seduction, and nostalgia. Yours had a much more modern and literal feel to it, but i liked it!
I felt it had an air of imposing sadness or tragedy about it as it progressed through from 'gurgle and glisten' , 'big and juicy' to words like 'low and imposing' and 'drowning'.
Well done. | Very evocative
Written by Talisker (1309 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | I like this epigrammatical description of a moment. Simple observation of a situation - it brings back my own camping days.
I'm not familiar with the Edwin Morgan poem.
Oli. |
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