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By brook_rivers
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26 August 2006 |
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I am lost In a Maze Of Broken dreams Every way I turn There is an obstacle
I can not see My way out Or the route That leads to the heart
I can only see back; behind me To the precarious path The beaten track On which i have already passed
To the circles I have walked in Trying to find myself trying to find you. |
Confession Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | | I have to confess, I'm not sure I know how to read serious, modern poetry. However, this piece captures an emotion in time and I liked it. | Hurting and Deep Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | Brook this is poignant, painful poem and one that screams of need. The need to find direction, to catch a line and draw in, back to a loving heart. Again the honesty conveyed in your words gives this poem a sudden brutality, a feeling a unbelieavably deep hurt and pain, and that resolution is still out of reach... It hurt me to read this, but I am also pleased I did, as this is superb. With best wishes mish x | Ditto Written by Gill21 (594 comments posted) 27th August 2006 | | Mishmish hit the nail on the head here. Brilliantly deep and painful. Well done. | Ouch! Written by Talisker (1367 comments posted) 30th August 2006 | Sorry, just painful to me. The ramblings of a disorganised, confused mind. I think you may be the Spinal Tap of poetry - this is like a pastiche of 1960's hippy psychadelic claptrap. I'll have a gram of what you're on... Oli
| Has none of the beauty of your "Dream L Written by Talisker (1367 comments posted) 30th August 2006 | Please get back on track brook. I love some of your other work. Oli |
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