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By brook_rivers
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26 August 2006 |
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I am lost
In a Maze
Of Broken dreams
Every way I turn
There is an obstacle
I can not see
My way out
Or the route
That leads to the heart
I can only see back;
behind me
To the precarious path
The beaten track
On which i have already passed
To the circles
I have walked in
Trying to find myself
trying to find you. |
Confession
Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | | I have to confess, I'm not sure I know how to read serious, modern poetry. However, this piece captures an emotion in time and I liked it. | Hurting and Deep
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | Brook this is poignant, painful poem and one that screams of need. The need to find direction, to catch a line and draw in, back to a loving heart.
Again the honesty conveyed in your words gives this poem a sudden brutality, a feeling a unbelieavably deep hurt and pain, and that resolution is still out of reach...
It hurt me to read this, but I am also pleased I did, as this is superb.
With best wishes
mish x | Ditto
Written by Gill21 (594 comments posted) 27th August 2006 | | Mishmish hit the nail on the head here. Brilliantly deep and painful. Well done. | Ouch!
Written by Talisker (1367 comments posted) 30th August 2006 | Sorry, just painful to me. The ramblings of a disorganised, confused mind. I think you may be the Spinal Tap of poetry - this is like a pastiche of 1960's hippy psychadelic claptrap.
I'll have a gram of what you're on...
Oli
| Has none of the beauty of your "Dream L
Written by Talisker (1367 comments posted) 30th August 2006 | Please get back on track brook. I love some of your other work.
Oli |
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