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By kevg
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26 August 2006 |
Written for a contest in which the author had to tell a story in 100 words, without repeating any. A tough challenge. Belle Streetlights illuminate dark shadows, while wanderers drift toward destinations unknown. Traffic whizzes by periodically, blowing confectionary wrappers onto well worn footpaths. She sits patiently awaiting redemption, epiphany; brutally scarred from yesterday's heartbreak. Quiet alleys harbour homeless souls, protecting vagabonds against venomous winds. Meanwhile, Belle tells stories to any willing ears, desperately seeking a white knight amongst countless undesirables. Strangers glance, pass; continue unaware. Blissfully ignorant of individual pain, lost inside selfish thoughts depicting material trivialities. Maybe next time thinks today's heroine, brave face shining brightly. Suddenly, saviour arrives. Jonathon - tomorrow's hero. Arms outstretched, beckoning. Lonliness evaporates into the ether, forgotten. |
Very Brave
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 27th August 2006 | I read this as it was very experimental and I enjoy things totally original. And I liked this...
This type of writing is incredibly difficult to do, much less get anything that's of literary merit. So I tip my hat to you. Certainly not something I'd like to attempt...
Well done!
best wishes
mish x | Just wish I'd written it -- or could ha
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 12th October 2006 | I think this works not only as a no-word-repeated story, but also as a 100-word story. Either of these would be hard to pull off, so managing both in one go is really something. Not even the prepositions are repeated, and yet this does not come off sounding like 'Pack my jugs with five dozen liquor jugs' or 'The quick brown fox jumped over the yellow dog.' Wow!
I am long-winded by nature, (as you can see from this message), and find writing very short fiction agonizing. I also find reading it dry and dull: I love adverbs and adjectives and find it very sad that putting too many of them in a piece is considered a no-no. But there are plenty of adjectives in this, and they all work well and create some lovely images. I liked 'quiet alleys harbour homeless souls' -- and the idea of the heroine's 'brave face shining brightly.' |
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