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Granma
By cynicsid
28 August 2006
An oddity.

Granma we love you
though you smell of wee.
And you always dribble
when you drink your tea

All us kids love Granma
Despite her awful fart 
Because we all know 
She's got a golden heart.

And she gives us fun food for tea
and afters just dripping with cream
mummy says it is unhealthy
But to us they're like a dream. 

Dad  says make the most of Granma
You'll miss her when she has to go
And I sorely do, even though
It was more than twenty years ago.

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Simple...
Written by kevg (45 comments posted) 27th August 2006
....funny, and effective. An enojyable read. Nice injection of humour in the last stanza. 
 
I also noticed a change in the line length for stanzas 3 & 4, is it deliberate? It certainly goes well with the notion that Granma has stayed too long. Good technique. 
 
Thanks for the read. 
KevG
Hi KG
Written by cynicsid (177 comments posted) 27th August 2006
Glad you like it. 
 
"I also noticed a change in the line length for stanzas 3 & 4" 
 
ST 1 and 2 were simply parodies of a ghastly simpering popular song.  
 
However St 3 attempts to imitate "the kids" 
 
(Fun Food i.e. no gravy or cabbage, but chips and beans and burgers) 
 
St 4 starts in the manner of 3 then in line 3 it changes again there is a pause in the line, a triple rhyme and this reflects a change in mood and manner of expression, From childish to Adult,silly to nostalgic. 
 
I really do miss my Mothers Mother. 
 
(Mind she didn't smell of wee, dribble or fart but she certainly had a 24 carat gold heart.) 
 
Sad Siddie 
 
Oh dear...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 30th August 2006
I bet the old dear is spinning in her grave (unless cremated). Don't give up the day job just yet. 
 
Oli

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