More inspiration from 'ol Chutters.
I think I may have to top myself,
my life has become such a pain.
There's nowhere to hide,
and I cannot decide,
should I jump out in front of a train?
I'm feeling particularly low right now,
no woman to love and/or marry.
Still, bugger a wife,
what I want's a sharp knife,
to indulge in a little Hara-Kiri.
A bottle of pills might just do the trick,
as I'm feeling so misunderstood.
Would it switch out my light,
should I leap from great height,
and career to the ground with a thud?
My existence is so insignificant here,
just another witch in the coven.
I might move my bed,
to the kitchen instead,
then nod off with my head in the oven.
I am just so lost in this World right now,
as if stranded, way out on a ridge.
How they'd laugh from their bellies,
if I donned concrete wellies,
before chucking myself off a bridge.
Did somebody mention choking myself?
what a joy I'm sure that would be.
There'd be little despair,
I'm sure no-one would care,
should they find me strung up from a tree.
Alas, I fear I daren't do it, you know,
end it all, in a manner sublime.
But I still gotta show 'em,
so I'll pen a sad poem,
where lines 2 & 5 always rhyme.
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In Praise of Mangoes.
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
You may not be bound for Poet's Corner. But assuredly there is a place for you in Pseud's Corner. Though its rather crowded I hear.
Matchless superiority. The Chapman Keats Prize for Lyrical Lampoon While Topping Oneself.
Surely this should be duplicated on Comedy. Goodness knows they need to be shown how to tell 'em in rhyme. Its coming to something when Poetry has the best comic verses.
Wonderful Chris!
Slan! |
I concur
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
(although I forebear to comment on comedy, being somewhat clueless in that area)
Brightens up a morning at work
Elli  |
Obrigado
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
Many Thanks. Am really getting in to the poets midset now. I have tried to convey that in my writing.
Best Regards
GVTSM |
Just relax
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3352 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
Ok Chris follow my finger, you are feeling sleepy, soooo sleepy..now you are completely under. You want to stop writing poems and go back to the comedy forum....Yes the c-o-m-e-d-y forum. You will feel an overpowering need to write something cruelly funny that doesn't rhyme or scan and bears no resemblance to poetry, Now when you wake your mouse will be drawn to the "comedy" icon.
one ..two..three.
cheers
BBS
P.S are you portugese? |
Oh dear!! I LOVE IT!!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
Dear Givitsum
Givitsum thought - what dreams may come when you've shuffled off this mortal coil. You may be stuck in GW for eternity. Forced against your better judgement to bare your tortured soul to us Philistines...
Oli
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Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
| funny how the way suicidal's minds work. i love the poem! |
Salamat Po..
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 1st September 2006 |
Thanks for the approvals.
I think, BBS, I am being drawn to my spiritual home, via immensely strong inspirational telepathic shoves from the MangoMan. And now Fengshui Fong has joined in, I feel amongst friends.
See you over in Comedy.
GIVITSUM |
CHEER US ALL UP
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 3rd September 2006 |
You don’t have to be a sad poet you know
We want someone to bring us some joy.
So pick up your pen
And get writing again,
Give us something we all will enjoy.
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i like it tooo!
Written by isobel* (26 comments posted) 3rd September 2006 |
for me, this is poetry, surely, whatever our personal tastes require - it has rhythm, it dances along in fine style and fortunately sticks to the point.
the fact that this has humour does not discredit its rights as a 'poem', in my own opinion. and im sure poetry is not just there to cheer us, otherwise who would purchase books by Ann Sexton, Richard Brautigan, Sylvia Plath and Dylan Thomas?
this is surreal in the sense that it takes a lilting, jovial rhythm and mixes that with a dark theme.
good stuff)) |
Well Said
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 3rd September 2006 |
Much obliged for your sensible reasoning isobel*. What does it mean though?
Givitsum |
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