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Tiree
By Talisker
03 September 2006
Tiree is the beautiful Hebridean island where I holiday every year.  Sinatra and Bennet may have left their heart in San Francisco - mine is in Tiree.

I think this is a clumsy and poor effort, it was like blood from the proverbial stone.  But I feel I must "dig through" the rubbish to get to the good stuff.  Be gentle dear readers.

Oli.


Each time I see you in all your perfection,

Sluice gates of joy open up in my heart.

Your beauty cannot be recorded in memory,

Your colours be captured by mere mortal art.

 

Waters of cobalt,  pearlescent sand dunes

Whiter and finer than fresh drifted snow

Reach to the edge of your emerald meadows

Glittered with infinite wildflowers aglow

 

Tiny white houses with walls thick as castles

Neat resting towers of green lobster pots

Time cannot trouble your  endless serenity

Your infinite beauty can never be bought

 

Your treasures from Hynish to Coales are strewn

Sunset Balephuil with her otters at play

Land of two harvests,  I wish I was with you

Tha gradh agam ort, I count every day

Oli



Reviews
Breathtaking!
Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 3rd September 2006
What a beautiful beautiful picture you pain. I hope you have given this to the Tourist Board. You'll send a rush of tourists there after this poem - especially me!
Correction
Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 3rd September 2006
It's a picture you "paint", of course - in most beautiful words.

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 3rd September 2006
You've certainly painted a beautiful picture of Tiree. I think it's very difficult to show other people your special places (ooer!) ,whether in the written or spoken word. I don't know if I'm seeing what you see, but it sounds very special. 
 
Thanks for your recent kind comments. 
 
Phil.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 3rd September 2006
I don't know why but while reading I kept humming Mull of Kintyre. I'd better not say any more

Written by isobel* (26 comments posted) 3rd September 2006
"Your colours be captured by mere mortal art" 
 
...this is a very difficult thing to do, but you have done it well:))) 
 
a beautiful homage to a place. 
 

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 4th September 2006
Clumsy and poor this certainly isn't! Can't say I like as much as some of your other pieces but there is some wonderful imagery in here. 
 
Elli
"road to Dundee"
Written by fellpony (1580 comments posted) 28th January 2007
"I don't know why but while reading I kept humming Mull of Kintyre." not in my case BBS - what I ended up with was the metre of "Wha asked me the road and the miles to Dundee" ... and it felt right, everything dropped into place. So I read it again, with much more appreciation. Thanks Oli ...  
 
 

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