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Sea of Thoughts
By JourneyAtNight
08 September 2006
Just a short one here. When i'm by the sea, it can be a big comfort to just sit at the beach and think it all away ( as cliche as it sounds!).
xxx

The silver waves sway,
Caressed softly by the glow of the moon,
Serene, sympathetic.
And with each motion of the tide,
They draw away my woes and worries,
Leaving me
With a reassuring breeze,
A gentle kiss.

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Written by ellipinnock (1795 comments posted) 8th September 2006
You've almost managed to capture a tidal feeling in this piece. Not bad at all. 
 
Well done 
 
Elli
Nice
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 8th September 2006
Kind of hypnotic, which the sound of the sea is. I can connect. 
 
Regards being short - no problems. The problems occur when folks add "padding" just to make something of a "respectable" length.  
 
I prefer "commando" poetry - get in there, say what you need to, get out. 
 
I will watch for more of your work. 
 
Oli

Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 8th September 2006
Fast and pleasant, with a nice rithm. Guess I should go to the beach after sunset ;)

Written by Phil (7009 comments posted) 9th September 2006
With all of the above, particularly the rhythm of the piece. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil. 
 
:)
Written by rilLie (329 comments posted) 9th September 2006
i like this poem :). the rythm's nice and the imagery is perfect. well done!

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 10th September 2006
this is the first post that i have read by you & I will look out for your work from now on! A simple, beautiful and effective poem. 
well done 
 
Brook :)
Lovely
Written by Josie (2849 comments posted) 13th September 2006
I liked your poem and will also look out for others. I think that if we only have time to stand and stare sometimes, we can get a lot of inner comfort from the world of nature. But, on the other hand, nature can also be cruel too. You picked the sea when it was serene, but I think it has a nature of its own. Very well done. I, too, will look forward to some more of your work.
so evocative
Written by gwyddyn (28 comments posted) 2nd July 2007
Brilliant. I'm in work at the moment and reading this is certainly chilling me out.

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