Great Writing - Home > Poetry > Turning a new leaf
READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 1393 guests online and 8 members online
Poetry
Turning a new leaf
By rheavee
08 September 2006
Hi! This is a great site. Here I'm attaching my own work- this is really not much but I hope it will catch your fancy...



Turning a new leaf                  

Yesterday’s a nightmare
A violent dream
 

Tried to shut it off
No use to dwell on it
 

The hurts and consuming pain
Better leave behind
 

Looking forward for tomorrow
As a new chance
 

To look at the sun
And embrace the sunshine
 

Smell the flowers
And drink from the fountain of life
 

To laugh again
Pulses alive with excitement
 

Feel the heat
And shudder from the cold
 

Life’s’ symmetry
Back to focus
 

This is turning a new leaf
A beginning to welcome…

Reviews
Turning a New Leaf
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 8th September 2006
I liked the simple but strong message in your poem. If you watch the dreadful things on the news, I am sure there are a lot of people out there who can go along with this message. It links well with my poem about moving on from the past, but, as someone said, it takes time for things inside to heal.
Life must go on...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 8th September 2006
Yes. But I found this disjointed and trite. For me poetry is more than some apparently randomly arranged words. Its poetry Jim, but not as I know it! 
 
 
Oli 

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 9th September 2006
A nice idea, but for me, there is a lack of focus or depth.  
 
Particularly liked: 
 
Feel the heat  
And shudder from the cold 
 
 
Phil.
Appreciation
Written by rheavee (13 comments posted) 17th September 2006
thanks for the comments... I appreciate all of them.. looking forward to learn the rudiments of poetry from all of you...

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item