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Poetry
Death is his comfort
By JourneyAtNight
08 September 2006
Alone he sits
Blankly gazing out the window,
Appearing almost lifeless, apart from
The watery droplets of time that line his eyes.

Ninety-nine years of Memory
Of life, of love and of losses
Swirl around in his mind,
like the merciless mist of the sea.

He sails through them vacantly,
knowing they matter little now.
He desolately, despairingly ponders...
Where did it all go?

He had a fruitful life
But now, those beautiful blossoms
Have gone,
Shriveled away with this cold, unbearable winter.

Time has been cruel.
The clock on that blank painted wall
It ticks away slowly, ruthlessly as
Frost huddles, not caring, on this double-glazed barrier.

The young women in white smiles, she chats mindlessly.
He does not listen; she is not part of his world.
She lives - they all live.
He only reminisces living.

Life
Life was miles away.

A shred of light cuts the fog;
He knows that death,
Rest,
Is not so far.

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Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 9th September 2006
There is a feeling behind this poem that sent a shiver up my spine, but i think perhaps it could be expressed better for more intensity? It read a little too like prose to me. There is some really good stuff here though. I loved  
'merciless mist of the sea' and the symbolism with time. The last stanza is good too. It just felt a little muddled, there were almost too many images going on that didn't quite link up? You have used weather alot to describe emotion then the clock is just stuck in there. Perhaps use a tide to symbolise time instead? 
Well done though, good read!

Written by Phil (7008 comments posted) 9th September 2006
Good read, particularly the last 6 lines. Most of your ideas developed well, but the clock image didn't work as well as the rest. 
 
Phil.

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 10th September 2006
another brilliant poem! 
I agree with Gill that it did have a story like quality to it but it was far too poetic to be considered as prose IMO! 
 
Brook

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