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Time Gone
By Buchan
09 September 2006
Just thoughts that you cannot do what you have not done..  Yesterday has gone ,there is only today and tomorrow...Use them with wisdom

                  I would like to talk with you
                  No time,I am very busy
                  Need to smell the rose
                  No time,I am very busy
 
                  Today stay at home
                  No time, I am very busy
                  Play with the children
                  No time ,I am very busy

                  Walk and laugh with you
                  No time ,I am very busy
                  Watch you sleep in peace
                  No time,I am very busy

        Time, you have been so unkind to me
         Or have I just been very ,very busy?
               

           

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Wonderful
Written by Josie (2823 comments posted) 9th September 2006
You have captured exactly what most people feel. I am retired now. I went for a walk on our beautiful Ilkley Moor yesterday with my husband, and said thanks to God that I had time to stop and watch the ducks, to notice the red rowan berries and the golden leaves on the chestnut trees - all relfected beneath a blue sky in the little lake (The Tarn). We have less money now, but are rewarded ten times over by having "time". Well done you. It is a wonderful subject.
Loved this...
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 9th September 2006
Hi Buchan 
 
This is beautiful, I really got into this excellent poem instantly. 
 
The repetition of 'I am very busy', just enhanced the feeling of continuous busyness that we all face. We've all done it, said we'd see someone, but then our lives catch up and the time is gone, we find that person has moved, or died, and the moment of connection is gone. We live a life of what if's...You captured that feeling so, so perfectly. 
 
Being in high pressure job, I can relate to this and your poem was a bit of a wake-up call... 
 
Very well done...a lovely poem. 
 
Best wishes 
 
mish x
Nearly too busy to write this!
Written by Star-Light (13 comments posted) 9th September 2006
Really loved it, been working all day and nearly didn't have time to look at this great site but then I thought I must make time to read a few excellent stories and poems! Glad I did, I am sure many other people will relate to your poem as well. Well done! :)
excellent
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 9th September 2006
excellent poem! all said! 
 
-rilLie 
 
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