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By brook_rivers
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10 September 2006 |
I arose early one morn,
To witness the break of dawn,
The beautiful image of the sun being reborn,
As the pale blue sky was magnificently torn,
Into a thousand pieces
As the intensity of the sun’s rays ripped through it:-
Orange, yellow, red and a deep, unassuming plum.
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Written by Phil (7008 comments posted) 10th September 2006 | Like 'Faerie Blossom,' you've captured the essence of a picture again. I really liked your observations, you seem to have a talent for painting pictures in my head.
I was a bit confused with 'unassuming plum,' but this might only be me.
Liked this a lot,
All the best,
Phil.
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Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 10th September 2006 | thanks for your review Phil
I have to confess I did put the 'unassuming plum' there just to confuse people!!
Brook  | Beautiful
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 10th September 2006 | You've captured the early dawn so exactly, I could see it before me..
I liked the 'unassuming plum' its uniqueness complemented the poem and made it more special.
A really lovely poem...well done, Brook.
Best wishes
mish x | Lovely
Written by Josie (2849 comments posted) 10th September 2006 | | You've captured sunrise exactly. What a world if we couldn't appreciate the beauty of nature. Well done! | ?
Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 10th September 2006 | I liked this Brook, you paint quite a vivid picture. I thought the `unassuming plum` was a little too deep for my humble brain- so was relieved to hear your reason for putting it there in the first place!
happy writing
woody |
Written by ellipinnock (1795 comments posted) 12th September 2006 | Made me feel very peaceful 
You certainly paint a wonderful picture.
Well done
Elli |
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 13th September 2006 | thanks for the comments everyone. I am glad simple poems are still able to get a good reaction!
Brook |
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