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A DAY IN TOWN
By woody44
11 September 2006
I `inadvertantly` deleted this little tale, so here it is again. It`s a One-act, `two-hander` for the stage.
 




  The scene is a railway station somewhere north of Watford. The platform is deserted apart from an elderly man and woman. He has no luggage and she has a small holdall at her feet.


   MAN: (Staring at the departure board)  Fifteen minutes. Are you excited?

   
   WOMAN:  Excited? No. Curious perhaps, but not really excited. That vanished forty-odd years ago.


    MAN: Half a lifetime.

    
     WOMAN: (Gazing down the empty track) Funny how things come back to you. I remember the day I met him. I`d gone to this poncy wine bar off the King`s road for a quick drink after my first day at work. I was just about to leave when he appears from nowhere and starts chatting me up. Said he`d got this fabulous pad in Chelsea and how I`d love it. Three hours later and somehow we`re back at my rabbit hutch of a flat, and that`s where he stayed for the next six months!


     MAN:  (Laughing lightly) Well I must admit he`s always struck me as a bit of a chancer...sorry but that`s how I see him. 


     WOMAN:  (Smiling to herself)  He was always a bit of a Jack-the-lad. He loved clinching a deal. Said it made him feel alive. And it didn`t matter where it was either. He once sat up all night on the phone so he could buy a block of new flats overlooking the Sidney Harbour Bridge. I mean, can you imagine, Australia! and he`d never even seen a picture of the damn things.

    
      (There is a pause as an express train speeds through the station and disappears, leaving the platform silent again)


      MAN:    Where you happy with him..I mean really happy?


     WOMAN:  I`m not sure. How do you measure REAL happiness?  We had our moments like all couples. He was so..so driven, made him hard to live with sometimes. Calculating too. Everything he did had to have a purpose.


      MAN:  Is that why he got involved with the kids, because it made him look good?


      WOMAN:   Partly I suppose. But there was more to it than that. He loved kids but he couldn`t  have any of his own.  `Not enough bloody tadpoles in the pond` he used to say. It hurt his pride of course, the big macho businessman. I once mentioned adoption to him but he dismissed the idea out of hand. Not something he`d produced with his own sweat and tears, if you see what I mean. I think in a warped sort of way the Africa thing was a way of easing his own feelings of inadequacy.

     MAN:    How did you feel when he told you what he wanted to do?

 
     WOMAN:  Suspicious at first. He was always a political animal, and like I said, he wouldn`t usually do anything without the benefits going firmly his way. But if I`m honest I thought mainly of what I would be giving up - the beautiful house, the cars, all those exotic holidays in the South Seas. But in the end I could see he was deadly serious about it...and so that was it.


      MAN:    I remember reading the headlines at the time:  Britain`s youngest tycoon gives it all up to help child AIDS victims in Africa`.


     WOMAN: (Grinning broadly)  Yes, he liked that. Mind you for a week or so it was mad. Press camped out on our doorstep, phone constantly ringing. Cranks saying why didn`t he use his money to help English kids. In the end I was glad when we finally boarded the plane and left it all behind.


      (Another train rushes through the station. After it has gone the woman continues talking):  
            I still have this mental picture of him..vibrant, brimming over with enthusiasm mixed with a steely determination. He never took no for an answer. Three brand new hospitals he built, in just two years. I`d never seen him so happy...no happy is the wrong word. Elated. That was it. Pure elation.


       MAN:   So what made you come back to England without him?


       WOMAN:  It took him over in the end. The media in Africa and over here were full of it, and I guess it went to his head. He had to be seen building more hospitals, getting the goverment to cough up more and more money. It was a constant battle and I suppose somewhere along the way I became just another of his minor irritations.


      MAN:   Still, you must be proud of what he achieved before he came back himself?


      WOMAN: (Staring again down the track)  I guess his hospitals helped save a great many lives, so yes, I`m proud of that.



       MAN: (Gazing at the woman)  Any regrets...?



      WOMAN: At the time, maybe, just a few.


                   (Sound of approaching train)


       MAN: And Now?


      WOMAN:   Now?  (Picks up holdall and clings to man`s arm)  Now my darling we are going to catch this train to London, watch the maiden speech of our esteemed new Prime Minister, and then we will go and do what we are really going to London for...A ride on that beautiful wheel and a shiny new toy for our favourite little grandson....                 
           
 

    




Reviews
You old sheister..
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 12th September 2006
I knew you were gonna reveal all in the last few lines, so before reading the last bit of speech I re-read all the build up in the hope of guessing.. 
 
Needless to say I failed. 
 
Good dialogue, so simple to read. 
 
Givitsum 
 
PS Do you think she'd be better with a pipe?
Enjoyable. As usual...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 12th September 2006
Hello Woody. 
 
I came to review you a while back and you had gone AWOL. No matter. Back now. Very natty little piece of business. Great to see you back in your spiritual home. Bit short Woody. You keep depriving us of Woody writ large. Whatever. 
 
I suppose you will be listening to Alan Bennet on Radio 4 at present. Mmmm. Burgess and McClean indeed! I hope he isn't thinking of giving away too many secrets. I've bought his autobiography ' Untold Stories'. I could have written that myself. Come to that so could you. Truth is for once less compelling than fiction. Complex individual. 
 
But why am I talking about him! Lovely little piece. Can we have some more!? 
 
Slan!

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 12th September 2006
Enjoyed this tale. Nice and simple, beautifully judged and with a good kick in the tail. 
 
Well done 
 
Elli :)
Hungry for more
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3452 comments posted) 12th September 2006
Good to see you doing what you do best,woody. A lovely bit of dialougue.I admire the way you leak out the information in the dialogue without it feeling forced or obvious, you hint at sadness and loss without ever stating it. The subtext was layered in so subtley and still it had the feel of natural speech. I agree with GC when something is this good you want more. 
I could just imagine this on Radio 4, it had that "feel" to it. I could hear it playing so plainly in my head that when it finished I was waiting for the continuity announcer to tell my about the Archers 
This is professional stuff 
cheers 
Jane
Thanks all...
Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 12th September 2006
Chris: Thanks. I was obviously too close to the piece to realise that giving my female character a pipe would indeed add more gravitas to the story, so thanks for pointing that out. Perhaps I can I borrow the redundant one from your Geordie bird... 
 
Gerard: I have made a mental note. `Write something a bit longer`. I think perhaps I`m afraid of overdoing it and going into waffle mode. Who knows..I too am wading through `Untold Stories`. He is going over old ground I suppose, in fact I heard a reviewer say the book could be cut down by a half. As you say, a complex character. Again many thanks for your erudite crit. 
 
MrsB. Again, glad you liked it. It is always gratifying to know that perhaps one is on the right trail (Gaud, I sound like Prince Charles). By the way I have made enquiries about the PM I sent you, and will let you know as soon as I hear back... 
 
Elli...Thank you too for your time and comments. Love your poetry by the way...
returning the favour
Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 13th September 2006
You know i read this a couple of days ago and i didn't leave a comment for fear of sounding stupid, because i didn't get it, and i know i am missing something really obvious. I'm not completely dense honest i'm just at a loss! 
Anyway moving on, i still loved the story, it had a slight nostalgic feel to it (like the old movies based around train stations?) and the dialogue was great, it moved along well and kept me really involved. i'm sure i would have enjoyed it even more had i understood the end (let's just pretend i did).  
Well done :)
Ooh dear....
Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 13th September 2006
Thanks for the comments Gill. Sorry you didn`t get the ending. What is it they say, if you have to explain you haven`t done your job properly.... 
 
 
happy writing. 
woody 
 
ps Just so you can sleep tonight I have PMd you.

Written by coosh (890 comments posted) 22nd September 2006
No, I'm not reviewing just coz you posted on mine, I'd intended to get round to it anyway.  
 
Really enjoyed this, particularly the way you organised or incorporated the story through the questioning. And a nice punch to the end. Great.

Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 23rd September 2006
Thanks coosh, and point taken about not doing a `tit-for-tat` 
 
happy writing 
woody

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