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A Precious Gift
By luvccritters2
12 May 2005
Written for a contest I'm in (made it to the next round).Anyway the subject matter was regrets.

A whisper, a hug, an innocent kiss,

A precious treasure "you'll never miss".

Taken from you in a moment of passion.

A love you thought was everlastin'.

As dawn breaks you begin to realize,

it wasn't love shining in those eyes.

Unbridled lust, make your heart melt,

add another notch upon his belt.

A marathon running through your mind.

"Why wait, I love you, please be mine".

Intently spoken, the reason now clear,

to capture the gift you held so dear.

Years pass slowly, bring maturity,

no longer the girl you used to be.

Wishing now you could go back,

recapture the gift you now lack.

Your heart weeps, full of regret.

A life mate, you finally met.

A precious gift meant just for him,

was given away on a sudden whim.

                      Debi  5/10/05

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nice story
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 13th May 2005
not sure it does as a poem 
it would have to be read out loud extremnely well to make it scan 
just running through you could lose a word out of most of the longer lines-and still keep the meaning - just a suggestion
nice story
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 13th May 2005
not sure it does as a poem 
it would have to be read out loud extremnely well to make it scan 
just running through you could lose a word out of most of the longer lines-and still keep the meaning - just a suggestion

Written by Clodagh (29 comments posted) 18th May 2005
it's a sweet little piece, i feel you could say more without the rhyme though- personally i concentrate more on the rhythm and dont bother with rhyming as i find it a little restrictive but that's just me- it is a sweet little piece and well written. 
cloie

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