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Paper Elephants
By splatterberry
13 September 2006
a sonnet, originally written for a school assignment


An elephant forgets not, so they say
Like quick sand, we sink slowly from our past
Nostalgia holds on tight to nerves that fray
We can't recall the calm that could not last

As childhood memories dance past fleeting smiles
Like cut out paper shapes and childish dreams
Our dazzling plans are scattered all the while
As we learn adult eyes aren't all they seem

False hopes like a placebo to the heart
This history's lost in time, been warped and caught
We're searching for a place from whence to start
This future contains nothing that we've sought

Like elephants remember what they're told
All that glitters, we have learnt, is not gold.

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Paper elephants
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 13th September 2006
Your subject is great and the title is very relevant. I'm not sure that I quite understand "We can't recall the calm that could not last". Don't let your dazzling plans be scattered. Hold on to them and develop them. You are your own person. We're lucky in this country to have the possibility to shape our futures.  
 
I liked your subject and you did well on the rhyme and rhythm of your poem. Well done.

Written by splatterberry (5 comments posted) 13th September 2006
thanks for the review 
the line "We can't recall the calm that could not last" is in reference to the calm of childhood compared to the hecticness of adult life. 
and i just thought i'd point out, when you say "We're lucky in this country..." that i dont actually live in the country i believe your refering to, as im an aussie 
but the point remains the same  
thanks again
Priceless!
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 13th September 2006
Priceless. And a lovely little ditty too. My compliments to you. I live on Elephant Green, in the UK. It has a histiory that Elephants could never for get. 
 
Slan!

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 13th September 2006
Lovely, I really enjoyed this and, in the interests of succintness, I shall say no more :) 
 
Elli

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