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Zombie Zinc
By Lex22
13 September 2006
Whatever.


Zombie Zinc

Up by dawn with a grin


The caffeine kick embraces the hollow reality of the paper


No more greasy leftovers, just fast food eggs for the ride


Remember to pay the machine, but don’t complain or it may increase the fair


The homeless man notices your sympathy as you drop it in his hand


Does he want your place in line?


Perhaps


Do not fret, you blend in nicely and he will not remember after his next sip or inhale


Why do you weep on the bathroom floor in the enclosed stall?


Happiness?


Who promised you that?


Dust off those tailored pants soldier and stand up!


Only one more day until the weekend


You can make it through that

Reviews

Written by ellipinnock (1795 comments posted) 13th September 2006
I really enjoyed this, quirky! I like the layout of this and you have a nice way with words. 
 
Well done 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (7007 comments posted) 13th September 2006
I too enjoyed this. Open ended enough for a think when you've finished. 
 
Quirky? - Yes. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 14th September 2006
I read the first line as "up by dawn with a gin" - but then I'm a alcoholic. I enjoyed it anyway.  
 
Its kindof "of the time" - I guess you have a crap job, not great prospects, soul being gradually eroded. Maybe a meaningless office job? Thats my interpretation and I may well be wrong. I empathise anyway, whatever the angst is about. 
 
A great first post anyway. Thanks. 
 
Oli. 
 
P.S. Always a good idea to check for typos before submitting i.e. solider (soldier).

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