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Worm Juice Ryme
By Lex22
13 September 2006
Nothing but some fun for this one


Worm Juice Rhyme
 

Gross was the first word that came to mind

 

As the sweet tequila dripped down my spine

 

From the sixth floor apartment on the third of May

 

 Velvet Elvis had finally found his day

 

 As the Tequila worm soon found his path

 

Mr. Presley decided to take a crash

 

Down onto my head did the velvet burst

 

Into my thoughts, the worm took hold

 

The rain poured down and my bones felt old

 

Dam the world and all its pain!

 

The worm dissolved and brought the pain

 

Turn off the light!

 

My brain soon screamed

 

Elvis the worm has it in for me!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Written by Talisker (1309 comments posted) 14th September 2006
I feel I should like this - but I'm too stupid to understand it properly. There's some nice imagery: 
 
"Down onto my head did the velvet burst"  
 
Please "baby" me and post an explanation. Does this describe a drunken accident? Did you drink the worm? Were you listening to Elvis at the time?  
 
I'm just one of those simple people. 
 
Oli :?
read between the line?
Written by lovewright (2 comments posted) 14th December 2006
I try'd but I don't want to guess...attraction for all the kids because it was titled "worm juice .... 
on that time he was listening to the radio by elvis P. and inspired by johny cash while drinking tequilla and in the same time eating jelly worm and living in a 6th floor make him sick for some reason it was so stink and the worm is present... 
I don't know if this make sense hhhmmmnnn.... 
:roll

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