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By Stephen_Normal
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14 May 2005 |
Hello. This is both my first visit and my first post on this site. I don't know how appropriate a long winded introduction is so I'll stop here. Poem for John Someday I worry that all my friends will melt in oils on my lobes, congeal in my nose and be flung into a tissue and discarded. It seems everyone is in love - I'm not sure if this is a good thing. The only thing sadder than a memory is a photograph. I drank the milk of human kindness straight from the carton. It had gone sour and scolded me for letting it get the air. I apologised and finished supping. I'm knackered and could have done with your ear to bullshit to earlier on. But still, it was a productive day: five new poems and one new interest and many more etceteras.
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i think you're getting there Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 17th May 2005 | these sound like impromptu impulsive poems i think with a bit of polishing they can be really enlightening only other critique is you changed voice and perception at the end which left it hanging |
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