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How to make a grown man cry? |
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By ellipinnock
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18 September 2006 |
An experiment with tanrenga Give the perfect gift
Steal it, break it and return it
Tarnished beyond help.
His hopes are sinking, shattered.
He is burdened with lost dreams. |
Deja vu...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | Blimey Ellie...!!
Is that it!!??
Not worth much, don't ya 'ken!!?
Mind you, nice while it lasted!!??
Funny..I remember that's what the wife sez t' me last night in bed......
Slan! |
Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | Trust you to lower the tone!
Exclamation marks
In abundance turn my head
Bedazzled, Confused
For the review, many thanks
Is succintness a virtue?
ps. what else do you expect on a monday? |
Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | pps. I don't sell them by the kilo  |
Written by matt (18 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | | Mmmm - I like it - size isn't everything! | Or just twist his nipples...
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | Works for me every time,
Oli. | Matt and Oli...
Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | What can I say?
Matt-
Glad you liked it. Monday is just the wrong day for an epic
Oli-
That won't make you friends my dear!
But you're forgiven
Elli |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 18th September 2006 | Brief and to the point, but for me very effective. I've no idea what tanrenga is, but this one works for me.
Loved it.
Phil. |
Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 19th September 2006 | Cheers Phil
Tanrenga is a precursor to hokku which is a similar form to haiku... Just having a play really.
Glad you enjoyed it
Eli |
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 26th September 2006 | Loved the poem and loved your 'review poem' as well!!
Brook |
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