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Hi, I can go on and on about myself...but you'd rather read my stuff, right?

Recently,
on Discovery
I saw a Hawk
dangling midflight
like a kite
flown by a child's unsure hands

And I thought of my own childhood
spent in my native village
when many afternoons
were loitered
flying kites
or watching hawks
flirting with the air
like devoted lovers

Nowadays,
the cosmopolitan skies
don't permit
my children
such luxury

18-09-2006

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Written by matt (18 comments posted) 18th September 2006

Nice poem - reminded me of 'The Kite Runner' I just read.
But what a sad ending - haven't you got anywhere your kids can fly a kite nearby?

Reminds me of the film...
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 18th September 2006

"Kes" Directed by Ken Loach.

The kid "finds himself" so to speak by training a kestrel.

Very evocative poem. I enjoyed it - please post more.

Oli

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 18th September 2006

I liked the simplicity of this. Like Oli says, very evocative.

Well done

Elli

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 18th September 2006

I enjoyed this. The simplicity really worked well.

Lovely. (but sad)

Phil.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 19th September 2006

Great stuff! I agree that you've mastered a simple yet effective style. I felt as I were reading it as though I was being given a brief insight into the writer's mind. Thanks for sharing.

Written by rheavee (13 comments posted) 19th September 2006

Thanks! reminds me of my very simple childhood- away from the hustles and bustles of life... evocative indeed! :grin

WHY THE SUDDEN DEATH?
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 26th September 2006

HI!

Simple and very nicely written. Why have you ended your beautiful narration so suddenly? It makes the beautiful poem's ending so abrupt. Were you in hurry to end it?

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