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Lady of the lamp

By Buchan

19 September 2006

A wonderful woman with thoughts for others. A person of true dedication.

                    Florence Nightingale,of nursing and health
                    Came from a family of considerable wealth
                    Compassion for soldiers, just doing their best
                    Angel of mercy always,nursing with zest

                    Ahead of her time,with a wonderful brain
                    She gave her life to ease horrible pain
                    Dedication in hospitals true to her cause
                    Her life an example of caring no applause

                    The mother of nursing,expressed in today
                     Books and systems her particular way
                     Florence a woman of stature so tall
                     Your life remembered,good nursing for all.

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Florence Nightingale
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 19th September 2006

This is an excellent try at rhyme and rhythm, which I find extremely difficult to get right, Unfortunately, if you don't get it quite right, then it looks bad. May I just give a little help (meant in a kindly way):

Last line of verse 2: The rhythm's a little out of kilt. Try: She offered her care, not wanting applause.
Then last line: Your life of good nursing is remembered by all. I thought you had the words right, but not necessarily in the right order (like my piano playing).

I hope this helps - but perhaps it doesn't, ha ha.

Er...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 19th September 2006

Buchan, trivial though it may sound, I think you will find that the term for Nightingale was 'The Lady With The Lamp'. I say this not in any spirit of carping, but since the term ' Lady of the Lamp' was Victorian coinage for ..Ahem...a lady of the night.

Lovely little poem by the way. Shame to cast any aspertions.

Well done.

Slan!

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