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Egg Carton

By GWM

19 September 2006

This is the first piece of work I have sent out into the ether, or anywhere for that matter. I used Neruda's poem 'Ode to Salt' as a starting point. Comments gratefully reveived.

GWM
19-09-2006

Apologies to Pablo Neruda.

Egg Carton

This egg-less
Carton
I once saw in Sainsburys
I know
You won’t
Believe me
But….

It is now the home
Of Batman’s head,
A small stone,
A bottle cap,
A Cheerio,
Three grapes
The roll of
A dice.

The pitted brown
Cardboard
Is roughly
Smooth
To the touch
And smells?
Cardboardey.

It will become
Six volcanoes,
Or three
Brassieres.
A basket for
A hot air
Balloon.
Horses hooves.

It was the cradle for
Never-to-be
Chicks.
A safe place for
Embryonic
Omelette.
Organic, Free range
On the box
Of guilt.

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nicely done
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 19th September 2006

I never thought I would read such a good poem about an egg carton. I don't think I actually thought I'd ever read a poem about an egg carton! The structure gives it a quiet, thoughtful tone which I like, and also conveys a certain amount of innocence. I'm not sure about the last few lines- they seem out of place with the simple observations made in the rest of the poem. Otherwise, good work- keep it up.

This is good!
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 19th September 2006

Contemplative stuff. It takes the eye and mind of an artist to make the commonplace interesting.

I've often felt the guilt connection with eggs - but its not universal. I still see most of the customers at my local Tesco, happily buying the cheapest eggs, the box emblazoned with THESE ARE EGGS FROM CAGED BIRDS - by inference tortured creatures which never see the light of day. By rights the eggs should taste rotten.

oli

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 19th September 2006

I concur with Oli re the egg dilemma!
Enjoyed this, good quirky and a little bit fun, which is always nice!
Well done

Elli

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 19th September 2006

Well done GWM. It does take a skill to take the apparently hum drum and turn it into something special.

At first 'cardboardy' stuck out a bit, but on second reading I thought it was most effective.

Phil.

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