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Poetry
Evergreen
By JourneyAtNight
20 September 2006
This is really just about feelings not budging. Constructive critisism always appreciated.

Cheers

E x

Guilty moments,

I tiptoe back

Into  memories

Long denied.



Finger to my lips

Hush Hushing my conscience,

She bows her head

With shame.


But these seconds of silence

As I leave the awake

An ambush

They pull me through.



As I try to reach sleep

I see his eyes shining clear,

Green,

A forest Evergreen.

Reviews

Written by rheavee (13 comments posted) 19th September 2006
I like the start but it seems to lag behind at the end..  
 
Don't dwell on the past but gift yourself with the present...

Written by matt (18 comments posted) 20th September 2006
I love the simplicity - the story and the emotion lingers there in the background. 
Good advice rheavee - assuming the present is not too painful; then what - bury yourself into the future and hope the pain of the 'guilty moments' subsides with time. Sorry - was that a bit heavy. Nice one 'journeyatnight' - I know something of this!

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