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Poetry
Duck
By kitten_princess
21 September 2006
Comments, please! :)

The door screamed last night
as I tried to sneak in.
It leaked out an old woman's
cackle

while my feet,
those slabs, pockmarked with lacquer,
slapped the stuttering boards beneath,
like two dead fish on a
market stall.

I called on God
once, then again as
a bedroom door
seemed to ask a
question, upstairs,

"Please let me in.
Don't let him find me
here. Keep me safe."

But the question grew louder,
more deafening,
a roar of rhetoricals...

I couldn't answer
as I stood in front of him,
my glitter bouncing beams off
his faded night frock


Duck.

Reviews
Great imagery
Written by DozyDog (6 comments posted) 21st September 2006
Excellent poem Kitten Princess.  
 
Not sure if I caught the full meaning on just the first or second read - I've got a feeling I'll find more on subsequent readings - but the imagery leaped out at me from the start. 
 
Great audio-visual writing and very original; 
The door that 'leaked out an old woman's cackle', the feet that 'slapped the boards like two dead fish on a market stall', another door that 'seems to ask a question'.... I love it! 
 
I think there is a real sense of anxiety and underlying threat in this poem which I found irresistibly intriguing. 
 
Well done - this deserves another few readings :)  
 
DD

Written by Phil (6846 comments posted) 21st September 2006
Yep, slightly unsure of context. Is this coming home, sneakng in and just not wanting to get caught, or something slightly more sinister. I guess 'keep me safe' is a clue. 
 
I liked the way you've put this together. Some good imagary. 
 
Phil.

Written by Phil (6846 comments posted) 21st September 2006
Sorry about my spelling. ImagEry
good kitty =P
Written by no1butClo (339 comments posted) 10th November 2006
nice poem 
 
mwah x

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