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Flashing Blades
By Talisker
24 September 2006
You've got to fight for what you want,
And all that you believe,
You've got to fight for what you want,
To live the way you please.
So long as you have done your best,
Then noone can do more,
And life and love and happiness,
Are well worth fighting for.

(Flashing Blades - theme from 1970's kids program)

In the underpass,

It was pure class,

Found another.

Victim.

Cultures clashing,

Blades flashing,

“Get ‘im bruva!

Stick ‘im!”

 

In the darkness,

Having a lark Miss,

Never meant to,

Do it.

What you mean, son,

Having fun, son,

Skipping school, son,

Blew it.

 

Not your fault boy,

Have to destroy,

Other peoples,

Lives.

Disadvantaged,

Disenfranchised,

Got to carry,

Knives.

 

“Yes your honour,

No your honour,

Fings got outta hand,

Never meant to,

Stab the geeza,

We wuz all haff

Canned.”

 

“Let me off sir,

You’re a toff sir,

You’re a lucky shit,

You can’t judge me,

When you grudge me,

Just a little bit”

 

“Two tier system,

We get pissed on,

From the greatest height,

Just like Tyson!

Sonny Liston!

Man we gotta fight!”

 

Oli ( 24/09/06)

Reviews
Effective.
Written by Phil (6851 comments posted) 24th September 2006
Effective poem. No overt judgement, just a commentary. The judgement is all for the reader to make. 
 
Rhythm of poem zings with excitement - reflects youth's enthusiasm for his hobby. 
 
I thought this worked really very well. 
 
Incidently, only a few years ago I had to take a kitchen knife off a nine year old in school. God alone knows what he's up to now. 
 
Were times more innocent in the seventies do you think? I picked up from a comment or verse of yours that you're around 40, about the same age as me. I remember long carefree days playing all over the place. Although I did have the shit kicked out of me once by a group of older boys I'd never met. I try to give m boys the same freedoms I had, but find it hard to trust a world where your poem rings too true. 
 
Another cracker. (Do you never write a dud?) 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil. 
 
Very powerful!
Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 25th September 2006
This poem is quite chilling, but I think it's very true of society today, in some parts of our country. As my son grows older (he's 14 now), I live in fear and dread that he'll be on the receiving end of a knife when he goes out with his mates, yet I know I can't keep him indoors forever! 
 
A real thought-provoking piece there. I agree with Phil, you never seem to write a dud! :)
Back to you
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 25th September 2006
Yes, and I am fighting for what I want - and it is not to be insulted not just once, but several times when I have posted work on Great Writing. This is my last entry that I will put on this website and I will let people know why.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 25th September 2006
This really caught my attention and captivated me. In short, I loved it 
 
Elli
Thanks Phil, Lyn, Elli...
Written by Talisker (1330 comments posted) 25th September 2006
Its great to get some feedback - positive or negative. Though some folks on here don't seem to agree. 
 
Oli. 

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