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addicted to the chase
By arrowsmith10
24 September 2006
not quite sure about this, still making changes so any criticism is welcome!!!

Addicted to the chase
 

A smile awakens my
Longing
My needs ignite.
 

I feel so lonely,
Desire
To be desired engulfs/ consumes me.
Envious of couples
Contented.
 

I make a decision.
 

I find a victim.
Stalking my prey,
Invigorating.
I scream for the kill,
Success…
 

Perhaps for a week
The adrenaline of the chase
Ebbs/subsides
 

I become restless/ disenchanted
I realise I am not lonely,
I have no need for a companion.
 

I am merely addicted to the chase.

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Ah yes...
Written by Talisker (1300 comments posted) 25th September 2006
The thrill of the chase! Tis often to be preferred to the let down of the catch.  
 
Wait til your too old and ugly to chase though! Then you'll have to get your jollies in more mundane ways. 
 
I don't like your use of / - it seems to me to denote a lack of decisiveness. Otherwise, thought provoking - surely half the battle. 
 
Good work. 
 
Oli.

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