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Poetry
Forgiveness
By bloodange77
25 September 2006
I forgave the one that inspired this poem but I want nothing to do with him. He is in the past. My future is all I have.

Forgiveness
Years may pass;
Lives may change.
People become different;
The past lives on.
The future is unseen;
The present is the future in the past.
I will live on;
You may not.
My loved ones are in my heart;
Your loved ones are in yours.
We have a lot in common;
But we don't see eye to eye.
You have your oppion;
And I have mine.
Our lives will become one;
Our lives will seperate.
You tried to help;
But you gave up.
You quit the game;
Now I win.
I regret losing you;
But it's in the past.
We must all forgive the past;
Some of us will forgive.
Some of us won't;
You may not forgive me.
But I forgive you;
You may hate me.
But I........;
I feel nothing for you.
We are seperate;
Nothing can change that.
Not even you;
I know you don't want to.
I don't want to either;
We have grown to hate eachother.
But I am over the feeling;
I don't hate nor love you.
Others may think that I do;
They will never see.
I see it though;
The way through my past.
You taught me how to ignore the past;
I thank you for that.
Wishing you a happy life;
It's hard to do I know but I have.
Getting rid of my memory of you;
That's hard too.
But I will;
I will build my future.
Upon the ruins of what was;
The things between us shall be forgot.
What remains is nothing;
Nothing can seem like a lot.
I don't want attention;
No sorry is wanted either.
Simply a nothing from you;
That's all I want.
Forget me and leave me behind;
The rubble that was us is no more.
In my life I shall have love;
But it shall not come from you.
It shall come from others;
Who really cares for me?
Not you I know;
You didn't love me.
You only thought you did;
So I forgive you.

Reviews
Well done...
Written by Talisker (1320 comments posted) 25th September 2006
In getting all that teenage angst out!  
 
You are clearly very intelligent and your writing shows it. For me though, the full-stops at the end of each line give this poem a "staccato" feeling which stopped any flow. Just a personal opinion  
 
:)  
 
Oli

Written by bloodange77 (38 comments posted) 25th September 2006
thanks for the advise i will try to remember that next time. Thanks 
 
 
 
Love  
:grin BloodAnge77 :grin

Written by Phil (6632 comments posted) 25th September 2006
As above, I heard the stop/start flow as I was reading. Liked it though. I thought the pause for thought after 'but I...' was very effective. It fitted the poem perfectly and broke the 'staccato' feeling. 
 
Teenage angst - I remember having it, but I can't remember what it felt like. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Re-reading
Written by bloodange77 (38 comments posted) 20th February 2007
Re-reading this makes me smile.

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