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The Bubble Ride
By sueflu
26 September 2006
My little grandson loves for me to blow bubbles every time he comes and I do mean everytime.  I have an endless supply.  Something about those floating capsules inspired this poem.


The Bubble Ride

Blow me in a bubble;
I want to float around the town.
But don't you tell my mom,
For she will surely want me down.

For she said, "Stay in the backyard.
Don't you venture out that gate."
Hurry!  Blow me in a bubble.
To get out of the yard, I cannot wait.

Here I go!  Up.. up and away,
The wind is catching me.
It's taking me higher from the ground.
Now, I'm higher than the trees.

Wow!  The sights that I am seeing,
As I float from place to place.
There's Mrs. Harvey with a hose,
Spraying Mr. Harvey's face.

Look!  There's someone shouting.
He's shaking his angry fist,
At a policeman writing a ticket.
Hey!  It's my teacher Mr. Frist.

Cars look like little ants now,
And I'm traveling far from town.
Gosh, I'm getting really scared.
How will I ever get back down?

If the bubble burst and I would fall,
No telling where I'd be.
I could be smashed against a wall
Or hanging from a tree.

About that time, I felt my mom
Shaking me awake.
Boy, am I glad--it was all a dream
And one very big mistake.

So don't blow me in a bubble.
That ride is not for me.
For it's far more scary,
Than the fun it seems to be.



Reviews
Very imaginative
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 27th September 2006
Yes, my little grandaughter, Jessica, loves bubbles too. You have certainly lit the children's imaginations with this poem. It is lovely. However I would not spell very with so many rrrrrs as children are learning to read and it is confusing. Perhaps italics is better. I hope you don't mind my saying this.
That's true!
Written by sueflu (18 comments posted) 27th September 2006
I didn't think about that. Italics is another way to exaggerate that word without confusing the kids. Thanks again and please comment any time.
Do you really want...
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 11th October 2006
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