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my life my light

By *tinkerbell*

26 September 2006

It's taken me a long time to get brave enough to put some of my poetry here but I like so much of the work on this site that i'm hoping you will like mine too. this poem is about my feelings on how sad you can be even if you look happy on the outside.

My life
is not
as good as it seems

I know
I look
as happy as dreams

But I
am not
like the sunbeams

I am
as dark
as the night

You see
I just
don't feel right

As I
must wait
for the light

When will it come?

Soon

I hope.

Reviews

sympathy
Written by william (21 comments posted) 26th September 2006

You sound a very sensitive and deep thinking individual. Your poetry carries great charm yet also a deep sense of pain. If only I could fix you.

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 26th September 2006

beautiful poem. i loved the way you structured it!

Welcome to the site!!! I will look out for more of your work.

Best wishes

Brook

thankyou
Written by *tinkerbell* (5 comments posted) 26th September 2006

both, this is the best welcome i could have wished for! xx

LOVELY EMOTIONS!
Written by JohnnyD (72 comments posted) 29th September 2006

First poem is so nice, I wonder what are you waiting for? You have a depth to touch the chord with your readers. Keep it up... remember...the sun sets so that the moon can light the night!

Johnny D

A Chiaroscuro
Written by Patrician (7 comments posted) 28th October 2006

A true chiaroscuro. I love pieces that capture the light and dark. Yours is sweet. I also loved JohnnyD's comment: "the sun sets so that the moon can light the night!" that statement captured the exact sentiment that touched me.

Patrician

Written by Thatllbemethen (83 comments posted) 29th January 2007

Agree with what's been said above.

Look forward to reading more.

Thanks

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