Mr Rolly-Polly was a very greedy bloke,
always eating fish'n'chips and drinking lots of coke.
He couldn't pass a burger bar or a hot-dog stand,
and every night at nine o'clock he'd visit Pizzaland.
One day while having breakfast, full English, served with chips,
something strange did happen, he couldn't part his lips.
He tried to force them open but they were truly bound
and when he tried to shout for help he couldn't make a sound.
Poor old Rolly-Polly, now in a state of shock,
couldn't think of anything to make his lips unlock.
Then at last he realised his mothers words were true,
"The grease from all that fast food would turn to super glue."
After many hours of bathing and pampering his lips,
he finally prised a finger in between his lips.
Now the trauma's over and his lips are set apart,
a happy Rolly-Polly vowed to make a brand new start.
Now Mr Rolly-Polly's a very healthy bloke,
he wont eat any fish'n'chips or drink giant coke.
He walks past all the burger bars and every hot-dog stand,
and there's no more nightly visits to a place called Pizzaland.
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lovely Written by Ostara (61 comments posted) 20th May 2005 |
A great poem with strong rhyme and rythmn, and a great moral point! It should go down quite well with children as it has clear imagery and and things they can associate with. The middle stanza has me almost feeling sorry for the poor guy, although I am not sure if I am supposed to. The first line draws you in quickly, and it doesn't dither about - the poem gets straight to the point. The repetition of the first and last stanzas creates nice 'bookends' to the poem, a technique which I like as there is no tailing off and wondering if it is acutally finished! |
Important message Written by fortheloveof (5 comments posted) 20th May 2005 |
A great poem with a very important message. The only bit I wasn't sure about is this: After many hours of bathing and pampering his lips, he finally prised a finger in between his lips. it just doesn't seem to flow as well as the rest, but hey I'm no expert. Good luck with it. Diane xxxx |
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