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By francoise
30 September 2006
very quickly written, I have little understanding on the technical elements of poetry writing (still trying to get my head round it) It may seem like chopped up prose as a result. Nevertheless any comments and advice would be much appreciated. Thanks

Love is a duty
A tiresome commitment
I know he isn't free to choose
We are wreathed by a love 
Though it started well
Ended up washed up
and not so damn sure
We try to settle here
His questions are already answered
By the God of Love
But he asks anyway: Do you love me?
The Mighty One steps in and says yes.

Again I have to remind myself here
There are no choices with love
An unspoken rule
A mystical bond
A written law

Love

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I like this.
Written by bloodange77 (38 comments posted) 30th September 2006
It's a beautiful truth. grand but not sugar coated and not misadvertised. You did well for just trying to wrap your head around this. you're also right it does seem a little choppy.

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