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Poetry
The East
By francoise
30 September 2006


My sweaty mortal muse

My wandering penniless corona

To think you could flutter at the sight

Of an incandescant loner.

This careless freebreeze

Recidived into the slipstream

You shook up this sleeping lair

Where my archaic longings dream.

I stare up at your drunken lips

And am waiting to be sipped

A chyrasilis of winged conversation,

Take flight as we kiss

Flushing with a madness 

that runs awry at my feet

My minaret of furious faith

Bubble warmly when we meet

But then - your temples

Is this where I pray for my sins?

Not when I can be selfish

For a soft skinned heaven pulls me in.

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Wandering penniless corona?
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 30th September 2006
All a bit psychadelic for me. What do you mean by the above line?  
 
Not quite as bizarre as Emilios work - but a bit too obtuse for my tiny intellect... 
 
Oli.

Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 30th September 2006
Thankyou for my first official comment. I wrote this at university;one of many nights overindulging in the glory of creative writing. I didnt write it under the influence of any kind of substance, but i think the Oxford thesaurus was highly addictive. In reference to your query; it referred to a guy i liked who despite having no money (hence wandering and penniless as many students often are when they choose to study the arts) he was a corona to me: luminous and awe inspiring. Abit wierd too. Not my cup of tea anymore though. University life has a habit of clouding ones vision. :)
For Talisker
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 30th September 2006
corona  
noun [C usually singular] plural coronas or coronae 
a circle of light that can sometimes be seen around the moon at night, or around the sun during an eclipse (= a situation when the moon is positioned exactly between the sun and the Earth) 
- Not likely to carry money in its pocket is it? ha ha - Thought you would know this but you do now. 

Written by william (21 comments posted) 30th September 2006
Are you having a bit of breakdown?
for william
Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 30th September 2006
In answer to your constructive question; no.  
I hope in future we can have a better introduction to each other :)

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 30th September 2006
I have to confess, I struggled a bit with this. It had some nice lines like: My minaret of furious faith , but as a whole I was a bit lost. 
 
Sorry. 
 
Phil.

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