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Grandpa
By rilLie
02 October 2006
i was vaguely listening to our language teacher and suddenly, although, i can't exactly rmember (for the life of me) remember how it ended up that way -- maybe it was a discussion of the storm, or maybe just that my teacher liked music -- she played this hawaiian-sounding music to the lyrics of What a Wonderful World and Somewhere over the Rainbow by this German singer... he had a nice voice: it was smooth, and it sounded peaceful (of course, for the song, he's required to be) and he sounded old. i just sort of scribbled on my notebook.

The wrinkles on your face showed your age,

but certainly not the twinkle in your eye

or the lively way you play in our games,

or the way you sing, dance, or say goodbye.


You're very dear to me, Grandpa,

with you antics, quirks and jokes,

the way you smile and laugh,

or chase with bats the sodding blokes.


But all that was were lost for me

the day you left us all.

We cried and mourned all day,

I gladly let the tears fall.


You were always there for me

And I wish I was, too.

The chances I let by,

I just wish I still had you.

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Lovely and well expressed.
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 2nd October 2006
How lovely and well expressed. Like all of us, you don't realize what you had until it is no longer there, but I hope my grandchildren will miss us as much as you miss your grandfather now that he has gone. I know I miss my parents and grandparents - and just one day with them now would be worth anything. So treasure your memories for no one can take them away.
actually...
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
both sets of my grandparents aren't dead yet.. they're alive and kicking! i guess i just wrote this because a friend of mine lost her grandparents the other day.... but thanks for the review!

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