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empty lunchboxes and ants in your pants ( a working title)
By ellie-jelly
02 October 2006
I wrote these limericks a few months ago when my internet service was cut, and I've had them stored away on the computer. They're all about different things of course. One day I hope I can draw accompanying illustrations for each. One day. let's just stick with the words for now.

 
  There was an old man at the zoo,
 He wasn't quite sure what to do.
 So he opened the cages
 And chased the animals for ages,
Then was chased home by the zoo clean-up crew.


There once was a boy with a crow
 And I wanted to trade him my yo-yo
He asked what I would like
 And I wanted his bike.
 And he gave me a resounding "NO".


Once a boy ran out of toothpaste
 Soon the lads' breath smelled like sewerage waste.
When confronted on his issue
 He covered his mouth with a tissue
And ran to the shops with great haste.


 Once there was a cockroach
 Who reminded me of an old netball coach
 It crawled over the floor
 But ceased to be no more
 As my foot did swiftly approach.


 Once I was stuck in a tunnel
 With an odd boy holding a funnel
 He then dug a hole
 And told me that he was a mole
 At that point I wished I'd had a shovel.


 There once was a piece of toast called Wayne
 The bread he was made from was multigrain
 So he cleaned up his crumbs
 And told me "sorry I have to run"
Then he jumped down the kitchen sink drain.


There once was a pretty twinkling star
 That I'd look at through my window from afar.
 It glowed up in the sky
 Ever so high,
Against a sky coloured black like tar.


Once I had an awesome pen
 On it was a picture of a little red hen.
 So when it ran out of ink
 It made me think,
 I should have got the one with the picture of a wren.


There once was a chap called the Devil,
 Who's aim in existence was to maim and dishevel.
  So he sits on his throne,
 But in hell he's never alone.
 As the Crazy Frog is down on that level.


There once was a girl who thought she was a bat
 Always hanging upside down, never she sat.
 So she hanged from a tree,
 Then fell and broke her knee
 Then decided it would be easier to be a cat.


 There once was a giant piece of cheese
 Who hated the fridge, it always made him freeze.
 So he swung open the fridge door
 And exclaimed out loud "NO MORE"
 "I'm off to Bermuda with a circus of performing Fleas"


There once was an ant in my pants
 I was rather disappointed that it didn't make me dance,
 So I asked the ant why
 And he gave the reply
 "Sorry, I must've been stuck in a trance."


Once there lived a pirate on a ship
 And wanted something to entertain him on his trip.
 So he plucked a fish from the sea
 Put it upon his knee
 Then told it to perform a back flip.


Once lived a girl near Fivedock
 Who once went to school with an empty lunchbox.
So she danced lunchtime away
To keep her hunger pangs at bay,
So she danced so much she put holes in her socks.


Once there was an elastic band
 That wished that it lived in stationery land.
 It just lay in the drawer
 And didn't say much more,
 Then it snapped at an unwary office hand.


 Once there was a girl named Rose
Who loved nothing more than reciting prose.
 So all through the night
 She'd sit and recite,
 Until she had rid herself of her woes.


Once there was a treasure chest
Guarded by a pirate wearing a golden vest.
Take a step too near
 And you'll feel the wrath of the buccaneer,
Then he'll toss you up to the crow's nest.


 There once was a girl who dug up a hole
 That had an unfortunate haircut; it was in the shape of a bowl.
 She was afraid of the food
 So in her hole she did brood,
 And now she's as skinny as a pole.

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Limmericks
Written by Josie (2539 comments posted) 4th October 2006
I would suggest that you go to "Limmericks" on the internet. They have quite a strong rhythm, which children have to learn about. Children have to clap their hands in time to get the rhythm correct (as with other rhythmic poems). If the rhythm is not right, then you can't offer children yours as an example. Limmericks are fun, so why not do as I suggest and then try this again. Just for one example, just look at the second line of the last verse, and then try to clap in rhythm with the rest of your limmerick. Hope this helps in a helpful way because we need more children's poets who write in rhyme and rhythm.

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