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Trick or Treat
By BrianRobertNeal
03 October 2006
Radio Play? 2nd in a series about childhood. (Hi I'm Sam was the 1st.)

What's in a name? Was  A Seasonal Tale

Narrator-A woman in her mid-thirties is stood on one side of a kitchen table, her only child, a nine year old boy is stood at the opposite side.

Mother-No!

Son-But mum all the boys are doing it.

Mother-No!  

Son-But I’ll be laughed at and bullied again.

Mother-No!   

Son-Why?

Mother-Because I’ll not let my son be a nuisance to the neighbours. I don’t believe in witches and hobgoblins but I do believe in evil. This world is too dangerous for me to let a nine-year-old boy wander the streets in the dark on his own.

Son-I won’t be on my own there is a least 7 of us and we will be meeting up at Sainsbury’s.
 
We’re meeting at six in the car park.


Mother-I’ll take you down at 6 o’clock.

Son-They will call me mummy’s boy.

Mother-Well you can go but if you are not home at 7 o’clock, I’ll come looking for you.

Son-Thanks mum.

Narrator-The boy raced upstairs, he painted his face put on his pointed hat and cloak, picked up his little goody bag and then raced off to Sainsbury’s.

He arrived at a quarter to six and was the first there.

At 6 he was still on his own but he waited.

At 6.30 he decided to go home. He felt silly with his painted face and daft clothes so he went home using the back roads where he would meet less people.

He was very near his home and walking down a street that joined his road at right angles.

A man was stood outside his house by his car and as the boy passed him the man said,

Man-You’re the first trick or treater that I’ve seen all evening so you’re in luck. I’ve got lots of goodies so come indoors.

Boy-I’ve got to get home by 7 so I’ll not come in thank you.

Man-It won’t take a minute come in its cold and rainy out here.

Narrator-The boy went in.

His body was found 3 weeks later it had been hidden in a large drainage pipe stored at the back of a Builders Yard that was at least 70 miles from the home of the dead boy.

He had been abused and then strangled. He was naked but his face was still painted.

TRICK OR TREAT?

Reviews
Too gruesome?
Written by woody44 (765 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
Very macabre Brian. Well told, but I suppose the subject matter would preclude any airing on mainstream radio... 
 
happy writing 
woody
Agit-Prop
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
Hi Woody, 
 
Thanks for yout time and comment.  
 
What a wonderful opportunity for the Peadophile trick or treating is.  
 
"Oh come in I love tricks and I've got some treats for you, not just today but any time you like." 
 
Plus what the mother said re irritating the neighbours. 
 
Another wonderful American Import. 
 
Brian
Hi Brian
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
I found this deeply disturbing. For such a short piece it really stuck in my mind. It's one of those pieces where you are dreading the ending you know must come from the beginning. A disturbing read, well told as usual. 
 
Elli
Thanks EP
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
I really tried to use few words and hit home with a punch. 
 
What triggered this was seeing a 9 year old wandering on his own around my street, he was so vulnerable and I was furious that parents could be so bloody stupid. 
 
 
Thanks for your time and comments, 
 
Brian

Written by Phil (6435 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
Disturbing piece, well told. Your script picked up pace as it hared along towards the end. 
 
I'm not sure I'm in full agreement with you though. I hate Halloween and all that goes with it. I don't let my children go trick or treating. However, I do allow my children to take some risks. Without a certain level of risk, they can not learn responsibility. (I won't let them near the whacko at no. 35 though) 
 
Effective piece. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Hi Phil
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 3rd October 2006
"I do allow my children to take some risks." 
 
Don't get me wrong, I'm not for wrapping in cotton wool. This is a message to parents about a specific potential risk. 
 
"I hate Halloween and all that goes with it" 
 
So do I. 
 
Thanks for your time and comments. 
 
Brian

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 4th October 2006
I think the mother should be less concerned about a little trick or treating and a little more about teaching her boy not to talk to strangers and certainly not entering their house! She could of dropped him round the corner and waited until she saw he was with people. 
What is the world coming to. Plenty impact in such a short piece i am now uneasily uneasy and uncomfortable. Macabre indeed. However had plenty relevance and well worth the read!  
Thanks Brian :)
Hi Gill
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 4th October 2006
I delighted that this piece has proved to be tought provoking which was its raison d'etre. 
 
Once again thanks for your time and comments, 
 
Brian
Hit a nerve
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3169 comments posted) 4th October 2006
This was a really powerful piece that certainly hit a nerve with me. I am very uneasy about Trick or treating. I took a dig at it in a post,myself. I think it is quite sinister.  
The dialogue was so realistic, I could imagine it actually taking place in a dozen households and the ending made me shudder. You have knack for getting straight to the heart of the matter without a wasted word 
cheers 
BBS
Thanks Anne
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 4th October 2006
For your time and comments. 
 
Oh dear I was just about post something that is probably long winded and wandering. 
 
Brian
eeeeek!
Written by kerry1983 (9 comments posted) 11th October 2006
I got shivers! 
When I was younger we were allowed around our small street (12 houses) and parents stood outside and watched us. I don't know if people have got more evil or if it was kept quiet back then. 
Halloween is a great time if enjoyed responsibly, it gives alot of adults a chance to dress up and ignore fashion and trends! 
I fear it would spur alot of parents to dead bolt children indoors on 31st Oct, although raising awareness about safety around this time of year is important. 
 
If I have nightmares you're gonna pay!! 
Hi Kerry
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 11th October 2006
Welcome to GW and thanks for your time and comments. 
 
I've been toying with TOT 2 and your thoughts have triggered me into action, 
 
So thanks, 
 
Brian

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