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Stuck Like Glue
By sueflu
05 October 2006
A serious dilemma while growing up in my day!

Stuck Like Glu

My shadow’s always with me
I wish he’d go on home.
He follows everywhere I go
No matter where I roam.

I try to run and hide from him
He’s stuck to me like glue.
This shadow's always in my way
No matter what I do.

Even when I'm with my friends,
My shadow stays right there.
It seems he’s always listening
And always in my hair.

Today I arose quite early
Before the sun came out.
I wanted to leave without him,
So I quickly stirred about.

I tricked my shadow this time
And to the park I fled.
Sure enough he wasn’t with me;
My brother was still in bed.


 


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Funny!
Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 5th October 2006
I think children would like this poem very much and find it funny. You gave it a nice little twist at the end because we genuinely thought it was your shadow you were talking about. I thought you'd lose him under the trees, but was wrong. Well done and keep writing for children.
Thanks Josie!
Written by sueflu (18 comments posted) 5th October 2006
This poem developed so quickly. It even surprised me. My inner child must have hidden this away. My little sister was a pest at times. I appreciate your comments!
Oh dear...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 11th October 2006
Not up to child standard. Very reminiscent of Josie's work. 
 
No proper metre, the third line of stanza four and the last line of stanza five have too many syllables. 
The 2,4, rhyming scheme is clumsy and the words chosen are poor. 2/10 for trying. 
 
As I and others have pointed out, poetry for children should not equal poor poetry. 
 
Oli. 
Thanks!
Written by sueflu (18 comments posted) 11th October 2006
Now that's what I am talking about! Yes, you are right --poetry for children should not equal poor poetry. I will definitely consider your comments. Thank you! And that it should remind you of Josie's poetry --- an honor.
Not Thanks
Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 12th October 2006
Sue, your poetry is not poor by any means. Very much up to child standard, from someone who has written 150 poems for children and who regularly gets over 1000 visitors visiting my website every month. Children have to learn about rhyme and rhythm in a fun way, and if you write too far above their heads they have no guide to follow them. I regularly go into classes (and am requested to do so by local schools) and read my poems to children who love them. The subject of your poem and simple rhyme and rhythm is exactly what they would enjoy. Keep at it. This is a website for practising on and being encouraged by others. If you write to me, I can tell you how teachers are teaching simple poetry in classes to help you.
It made me laugh
Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 11th November 2006
I'm Bonnie, Josie's grandaughter. I am writing to tell you that I thought your poem was very funny. I didn't guess it was your brother until the end. Very funny.

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