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You
By niki
06 October 2006
I'm the Woman
when you're revelling,
and the Girl
when you dictate.

The Sense
when you need hearing,
and Illusion
to create.

You come first
for both of us,
that I've learnt
too late.

Reviews

Written by JourneyAtNight (318 comments posted) 6th October 2006
I really love this, its simple but beautifully written. It cuts right through to the reader with feelings of hurt, dispair and even anger. 
 
This really touched me, and I'm sorry that you had to go through something like that. 
 
"Learn from yesterday, live for today, hope for tomorrow." 
 
E xxx 
 
 
 
 
wonderfully excellent.
Written by rilLie (328 comments posted) 6th October 2006
i do like this. it's very simple, but it still reaches out to you with anger, or being hurt. 
 
excellent. 
 
-rilLie

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 6th October 2006
To quote: LOL, that IS going to be hard to beat on the tripe gauge, but I'm not far off, i warn you. 
 
I don't think so Niki. Far away from tripe, don't put yourself down. 
 
I really liked the simplicity of this. I cut to the heart of the matter. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Well expressed
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 6th October 2006
Yes, simply and so beautifully written - and so sad. He probably didn't know a good woman when he saw it. Typically men! Your few words expressed your feelings so well.
Sorry
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 6th October 2006
My typing skills seem to have deserted me of late. That should say: IT cut to the heart of the matter. 
 
Phil.
Succinct...
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 7th October 2006
And eloquent. 
 
Oli.

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