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The weeping willow
By dougle
23 May 2005
what do you think?

I remember the time by the river in the summers haze, I remember how your hair shone brighter than the sun, I remember the pure white lily in your hair, I remember as you lay in the crook of my arm, In the dappled shade beneath the Willow. I remember the smile which graced your face, As you drifted into peaceful sleep soothed by the sounds of the river. I remember how the willow wept, for soon the dream would end.

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Written by Weaver (4 comments posted) 28th May 2005
Enjoyable, wistful nugget. Can't decide whether or not you used 'I remember' too often. Maybe the repetition is an important part but I can't help thinking it nonetheless 

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