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Poetry
Haiku
By dhuandhar
06 October 2006
These pieces were written during a workshop that I attended on 'Creative Writing for Self-healing'


Reaching Out

I reach out
In your pain
Not knowing
I reach to myself.

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Hope

A sheet of grey clouds
against an outline of trees
on the dark mountain
Sometimes
between the two
appears the sun.

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The Temple Flowers

Yellow flower bells
Ring in serenity
Some droop
Others hail the sun.

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Hourglass

Surf sprays soak
Some grains of time
and waves dance to those moments.

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The Chandni Flowers


Four petals and a stem spread
A carpet of white
With brown earth patches
A circle hemmed in white flowers
White and olive green above

A flower drops
Its journey a whirligig dance
Unheld, unconcerned
White envelopes
A shapeless spread of boughs
Bounded in completeness
Is a halo on the ground.


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Old Woman on the Railway Bridge


Shrivelled in body
A wrinkled countenance
Counting an age
Lived or existed -
Veins have stood out
And eyes unravel a life
Misty and far away
But a smile
Frozen in time.


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Telling My Beads


My days
Like beads
On a rosary

A bead I count each day
Mumbling
Allow me to surmount
Another lament
Another pensive morning


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Reviews
Nice!
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 7th October 2006
Some nice poems here. Because of the style you chose they were a bit mysterious, but the titles are chosen well, so that they were clear after all. 
I liked 'hope' and 'old woman on the railway bridge' best. The first because it realy created an atmosphere, while the scene it painted so clearly was actually a metaphor. The second because of the detail described in so few lines. 
 

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