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Poetry
Snow Flakes
By JourneyAtNight
07 October 2006
I find that snow really brings out the child in me - I'm always the first out in the street as soon as the first snow drop falls! And I'll spend hours outside with my little brother mucking about in it.

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Quietly falling
Lightly stroking my face
Whispering a blessing -
"Be that child inside!"
The world has no boundaries again,
Pure hope surrounds me
White and delicate.
Looking above me,
Each glittering drop is
A magical dream
Another possibility.

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Excellent
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 7th October 2006
In a nutshell: Excellent. Your title is simple and yet says it all. Not only can we imagine the scene but you lead well into the feelings that you get from it using lovely adjectives: glittering, magical, delicate. Yes, we are swayed by the emotions of this poem and you have laid your lines simply but effectively. Well done.
Nice...
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 7th October 2006
But snowdrops are flowers - what you are describing is snowflakes. This spoiled it a bit for me - but could be easily changed. 
 
Oli

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