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What A World
By skripglow
08 October 2006
This one, and its companion piece, Yes, are the only two "poems" I intend to post.
Enjoy? That's up to you.

See the fire consume the land
well I asked you here
yes I asked you here,
bodies burning in the sand
and I asked you here
yes I asked you here


What a world
what a world
where no one has a chance to live
and peace on earth is just a myth,
it's just a lie you never learned
and I asked you here to this rat-hole world


Home is where the heart stops dead
and I asked you here
yes I asked you here,
children cry for their daily bread
and I asked you here
yes I asked you here,
see them run
see them hide
from acid rain, official lies
and movie dreams that fall and die
it's so absurd you haven't heard
that I asked you here to this rat-hole world


Cross my heart and hope to die
but I asked you here
yes I asked you here,
will nothing change as time goes by?
well I asked you here,
yes I asked you here


What a world
what a world
where paper houses tumble down
and concrete towers block the sun
and life is burned by a single word
and I asked you here to this rat-hole world.

Reviews
What a World
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 8th October 2006
When you say "I asked you here" - could you explain who has asked who where and why because I didn't understand it, and perhaps some of your other readers may not either? Thank you.

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 8th October 2006
Powerful piece. Read very well for me. The pulse of the piece added a pressure to the stark words as I read towards the end. 
 
Phil.
For the generations to come
Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 8th October 2006
I sometimes have my black moods. I too wonder if our children will ever forgive us conceiving them, though I fear the destruction of the planet will kill more of our kids than the wars will. 
 
This read to me more like a song lyric. Did you have a tune in your head as your wrote it?
What a World
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 8th October 2006
I cannot say that I enjoyed this, but I certainly liked it. The first and second-to-the-last stanzas were my favorite, as I liked their simplicity. 
I also liked 'where paper houses tumble down/and concrete towers block the sun,' as this phrase sums up the incongruity of ramshackle houses easily destroyed and large, expensively built condominiums co-existing in the world.  
 
It is true that we ask our children here, by and large, but most of us came by invitation ourselves. . .
Nothing changes
Written by skripglow (4 comments posted) 8th October 2006
Yes I did have a tune in my head when I wrote this. The words are those of a mother explaining the current state of the world to her child. The words were written in 1987. Nothing's changed much since then.
1987?
Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 8th October 2006
Damn, it's depressing that it applies more now than then.

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