Great Writing - Home > Poetry > G o l d R u l e s
READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 1401 guests online and 3 members online
Poetry
G o l d R u l e s
By Witzl
10 October 2006
I am currently "amusing" myself by studying post WWII history and in particular, U.S. foreign policy immediately before and during the cold war. I am amazed by how much was covered up and how many criminals were not just set free, but allowed to assume positions of great authority. Thus, this poem. . .

Please criticize:  many things need to be adjusted here.

G o l d    R u l es

Here’s to the ones who got away

So clever and conniving

The less astute did swing and sway

For all their hopeless striving

 

But those who figured out a way

to re-invent their actions

Why, now they swagger, speak and play

-- align themselves with factions

 

And freely give to charities

Creating great foundations

Wax lyrical on disparities

And strife among the nations

 

You’d never guess to see them now

The carnage once behind them

You’d be amazed to know just how

Their captors once did find them

 

They were a callous, cruel lot

Wild pleas they never heeded

Cold greed and gold were all they’d got

But that was all they needed

 

Yes, while they tortured and they killed

(Before their country lost)

With purloined gold their coffers filled

And that was victory’s cost

 

They bought a politician here

A former statesman there

Oh, though it may have cost them dear

They paid up fair and square

 

They’ve hob-nobbed with the well-to-do

And dined with politicians

And grand agendas they’ve pushed through

So high are their ambitions

 

And now they look so squeaky-clean

So generous and candid

You’d hardly guess where they had been

What each one, to a man, did

 

So here’s to those who got away

And here’s to those who freed ‘em

And justice? Well, what’s that? we say

And morals? Why? Who needs ‘em?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews
Hmmmm...
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 10th October 2006
For me, the style doesn't suit the subject matter somehow. The style is kind of cheery, the subject matter very "heavy". Sorry! :sigh  
 
I wonder whose version of history you are reading :roll I imagine that it is quite difficult to get to the truth, particularly in your country. They do say that the victors write the history, and the USA is used to being the victors. I think that Noam Chomsky is your best political/modern history commentator. Again, my humble opinion. 
 
Oli. :)
Gold rules
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3433 comments posted) 10th October 2006
So it does, every time I'm afraid. I actually liked the mix of the bouncy rhyme and rhythm with the heavy message. I thought it worked well. In fact you are in some very hallowed company with that style; it puts me in mind of Tom Lehrer who IMHO is genius incarnate. so why not take a leaf out of his book and put it to music, maybe a jaunty tango tune.These things work best when you go OTT 
Really enjoyed it 
BBS

Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 10th October 2006
Sort of with Oli on this one. For me it was a bit bouncy and jolly, although I suspect that is what you intended. I can see BBS's point too. 
 
Still enjoyed. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 10th October 2006
Thank you for your comments. I don't know why I do this -- pick jaunty, bouncy rhythms and rhymes for awful subjects, but it is something I cannot seem to stop. And I have had similar reactions from people to whom I have shown other poems -- and yet I still do it. I will certainly look at Tom Lehrer's work -- I have never heard of him, but it is nice to know that I'm not the only person with this weird habit.  
 
As for the victors writing history and presenting a version that is favorable to themselves, if you look at what happened after WWII, the victors didn't so much write history as conceal it. I am reading eye-witness accounts of POWs from many different countries, confessions of former soldiers of the Imperial Japanese Army, 'comfort' women from many Asian countries, etc. -- a real mixed bag.  
 
Yes, it is hard to get the truth on this subject in America. I am amazed at how much the government got away with -- and how so many people bought it, too.

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item