Half-past two and alls not well.
A chilled Northwester carries sulphurous curses,
Cold from Iceland’s glaciated tundra.
Moon silvered clouds scud in hasty procession,
Left to right across the sky in a private première.
The ground is orange-yellowed in caustic sodium light,
Unnatural, unforgiving.
The sadly desiccated husk of a hanging basket,
Swings like a long-dead corpse.
Wind-tickled clothes lines resonate Björk-whispers,
Promises of Big Time Sensuality,
Sending the pixie-faced temptress undulating,
Across my sleep-deprived mind’s eye.
A brindled tabby pads the scene unconcerned,
Then is caught in the camera-flash of security light,
And bolts for bushy cover.
And here is me, at the bedroom window,
Surveying my kingdom of painful,
Night-consciousness.
Oli (11/10/06)
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HI Talisker
Written by jean.day (2253 comments posted) 10th October 2006 |
| Wonderful poem - full of images that are so ordinary and yet you put them in an original way. I really enjoyed it. |
Very powerful
Written by LynB (434 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
Only just found this - very powerful imagery. Obviously a very personal poem, too - hope things get better soon.
Take care  |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3285 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
Have you tried Melatonin. Two tablets an hour before bed.Works every time. You wake up nice and fresh without any desire to write poetry
BBS |
No...
Written by Talisker (1315 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
But I did try a few dozen once with Johnnie Walker for company.
Sounds like you don't want to read my poems 
Ah well, never mind
oli |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3285 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
Oh I don't mind reading poems ,yours or anyones,I'm just worried that I might end up writing them write them in a weak moment
BBS |
P.S
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3285 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
Seriously though if you have got insomnia Melatonin really do work and you don't feel groggy in the mornings
Just a thought |
Natural solutions are best..
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
No need for chemical solutions. Your best cure for insomnia is to try reading a few of the soi disant poems around you on the site at present. Its my feeling you'll be out like a light before the end of any first verse.
Nice work.
Slan!
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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 11th October 2006 |
And to think I read stuff on this website to get away from science......aaaaaghhhhhh
Thought this was great Oli...'caustic sodium light' -wonderful.
Elli |
Fine work Oli!
Written by MarjoryBanks (14 comments posted) 12th October 2006 |
Captures that nightime loneliness well for me.
Soi-distant Gerard - your reviews are more erudite than the poems!
Glad someone else thinks of bjork in the wee smal hours,Oli!
Marge.  |
Written by Phil (6617 comments posted) 12th October 2006 |
Björk? No wonder you don't sleep.
Liked this very much Oli. Very different from your usual stuff (in terms of pattern etc), but effective all the same.
All the best,
Phil.
(This one doesn't work as electro-verse.) |
Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 18th October 2006 |
I especially like the image of the dried-out hanging basket swinging like a corpse, and the unnatural, unforgiving sodium light. It reminded me of insomnia, something I am intimately familiar with.
I've never tried Melatonin, but it sounds as though it's worth trying. Some other suggestions:
Lavender oil sprinkled on your pillow (amazingly effective actually,
and not unpleasant)
Camomile tea, warm milk (not together, of course)
Hard exercise
But really, a true insomniac knows that you might try all of those and none of them will do the trick. Some people, I have heard, are just meant to be insomniacs. |
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