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Knife
By gutterkitty
11 October 2006
I wrote this a few months ago. It's a bit of an experimental piece and I'm quite happy with how it turned out. I hope you like it.

I can see the colour of your teeth, when you shout.

I can count them there.
One, two, three
Ten, twenty.

I can see the red, red,
Red, of your tongue.

Your fillings,
Nestled blackly in your
White, yellow
Hard
Enamel.

The gums, soft and pink.

I'd like to kiss that mouth
With the shiny, shiny
Metal of my hate.

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Written by MarjoryBanks (14 comments posted) 12th October 2006
A dental hygienist's dissection of rage.  
 
Not sure about the shiny, shiny metal? Does this represent a baseball bat, or a large saucepan? 
 
Enjoyed this anyway, thanks! 
 
Marge.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 12th October 2006
Well peering into strangers' none-too-fragant mouths everyday has got to get the old rage goin'! 
The last lines are intended to imply violence rather than describing a particular object. 
Glad you liked it Marge :)

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